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Hill's_Chatabox Junior Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 46USA |
~*~INTo*~ Look into my eyes Thats where I fantasize Tell me what you see I can make it what you want it to be My eyes so deep and kind Did I feel you put your hand on my side You press your lips to mine I dont want to waste anytime How could you kiss me more than once And it not be worth as much Why did you slowly touch my hips Then again softly kiss my lips I see you day and nightly (in my mind) shinning ever so brightly Touch me this one last time Softly, Sweetly so fine and neatly Touch me so far deep inside That i crawl my way outside Forever your touch will stay Never fading away Your smile that melts me the way you held me In your eyes I saw so many things Hopeing what I saw was your future And that it was me your only future This poem is for a guy named Kyle, I wanted to be his everything, I wanted to be his future, But I sadly did not get to be. but I have gotten over it only because that is what I have to do. |
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destiny502 Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 57OH |
I know this pain. not pleasant at all.  guess we all have to have the unpleasant bullpoopy in our lives huh? Love can sometimes be like magic, but magic can sometimes..just be illusion |
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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
Hey Hill...I don't think nightly sounded right in that one sentence, maybe you should've said daily too, if you were going to say nightly, but the poem was so sad and sweet. I think you should send it to him in the mail and tell him that you could've treated him so good and he missed out.  "Time really does fly by and no one knows where it goes, so if you have something to say or do, say or do it now." [This message has been edited by Words_of_Glitter (edited 07-16-2001).] |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Bitter Sweet poem Hill, I enjoyed the read.  |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i liked the tribute, Hillary ...i think also...that you should send it to him or something...thanks for sharing, though.im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
A sweet tribute to your friend. I thought the whole rhyme scheme of the poem, though, was choppy. Some of the words didn't exactly rhyme but were more assonance. Thanks for sharing though. I look forawrd to reading more soon. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning... |
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Hill's_Chatabox Junior Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 46USA |
Hey I would love to send it to him but it is not that easy, because I am obvisously not want he wants, and I have to deal with that. But thanxs for the advice. I really appreciate it. Words_of_glitter, I changed that one sentence. and a few other things as well. Thanxs everyone. ~Hill~ Shoot for the moon cause if you miss you'll still end up in the *stars*!!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was one fine. I really hope the pain heals soon. Good luck with that.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
This brought back some memories....It's really well written. Too bad you didn't get him. Keep your head up. ~AF~ Psychopathic chickens are plotting against me... |
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