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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Knock me down and break my legs So that I can’t even fight when you Stick it in me again, born for your Amusement, is that right? Born for Your candy hungry eyes, born to be Ogled at and grabbed, born to be your Soundless decoration, born to be attacked And held down on the floor as you rip Off my clothes and touch my body and Then go to your friends and call me whore, You didn’t tell them that I fought back, that I screamed and yelled and cried while You laughed and grabbed and smiled and Threw me down again, yeah she’s a whore, She’s a whore, she’s a whore, because You can never own me, I’m a whore, you Selfish and pitiful little pieces of our Disgusting and broken society [Jaime] "I think I would like to call myself 'the girl who wanted to be God'." Sylvia Plath |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
While writing this I was enraged (needless to say) so if I offend you.. well.. sorry... but I don't really care. It should unnerve you. Here's the truth as it has been presented to me. My pieces of reality.. my spit.. my blood. [Jaime] |
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LilTai Member
since 2002-06-08
Posts 189United States |
Oh, sweet sweet girl...I truly hope this never happened to you...as I was raped, abused & all of that [edited by moderator], I hope you never have to go through that pain and if you already HAVE....oh my, I'm so so so sorry sweetheart and if you need anything let me know-I'll do whatever I can... this poem has so much emotion and truth and its written so well even though it is so painful to read (and even more so to write) and there is so much anger...Ah, I'm sorry this just hit a weak spot on me..I know the feelings in this poem, keep your head up. They cant get you. Tai I'm an idealist..I don't know where I'm going, but I'm on my way =) [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (09-10-2002 07:15 PM).] |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Yes, it actually happened.. I could explain more but I don't feel like it. *shrugs* Thanks for your reply. [Jaime] |
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LilTai Member
since 2002-06-08
Posts 189United States |
Jaime, sweetheart...I am so so sorry..I can't even express the pain I feel for you..I understand what you're going through and how you may feel, if you need someone to talk to, I'm here for you. So sorry you had to go through something like this. :'( Tai |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
This happened years ago. I don't want any pity or sympathy. Thanks, but I don't want it. I just wrote this because I'd be lying if it had no effect on me... because this crap is so passive that people don't see it and they trade in compassion and courage for apathy because it's easier to just not care. So it's not just the actual actions and mentalities there is to fight, but also the silly illusions we've all formed in out minds to make everything easier. I really do appreciate the offer, but I'm okay. Believe it or not. [Jaime] "I think I would like to call myself 'the girl who wanted to be God'." Sylvia Plath [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (06-17-2002 10:37 PM).] |
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LilTai Member
since 2002-06-08
Posts 189United States |
Jaime, I DO believe you're ok..I'm not giving you pity, only empathy as I know how it feels. I agree completely with what you've got to say..I read your poetry pretty consistantly and really like the truth and emotion (as well as the style) with which you write. Anyways, I'm just here to say I enjoy what you write, and even if most people are scared of hearing the truth, I really appreciate and understand what you say. And its all so well written. So...I'll leave you alone now..I'm glad you're ok, and if in the future you ever do need anything, just know I'm here. Sorry for the corn,  ...I dunno what I'm saying...just, well..take care of yourself. Tai |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
-jaime- i've read your other replies to this poem, so i won't give you a big dramatic speech about how sad i am, although i am of course. i'm not being insensitive, just doing what you asked. i also wanted to say i really enjoy your writing for alot of different reasons. okay, so here is what i think...i thought the rage in this was great, not just sitting around and being a another victim, but in fact making it a [edited by moderator]. i don't know you, but i'm proud that you were so strong with your words. i also liked how you just bluntly made the title "rape" instead of trying to dance quietly around the subject. thank you for sharing this, and yay@you for being strong with it. -bergundy- maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio- [This message has been edited by Kit McCallum (09-10-2002 07:16 PM).] |
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Zukene_Chic Member
since 2001-09-26
Posts 152Cali |
Wow. That was well written. A subject not often talked about (not that I'm saying it should). Odd how experiences vary, ne? |
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ericaisamonkey Member
since 2002-04-04
Posts 51A little town north of nowhere |
wow. thats all i can really say. I've had a similiar experience, but i wasn't pushed down, or had my clothes ripped off. the guy that did it to me, just did it over and over again. everytime i saw him. ::shudders:: anyways, it was something that i don't think anyone should be offended by, very touching, and its so real you make us see it as you saw it. as if we were looking through your eyes as it happened. once again GREAT JOB, i'll be looking for more of your stuff. i hope you don't mind, but i added this string to my library. thanks much! keep writing!!! *Erica* |
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BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA |
O my God, so it's happened to you to? Please tell me you got some justice. The work is wonderful, if only the idea was not what it was. Why do some men have to be like that? It's not even write to call them men but I don't think I should use the proper name for them here. Hope your ok, I really do. It's hard to bounce back from, I know. ~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~ |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
I can almost hear you screaming this inside my head, which only adds to the fact that this shows what rape is. Rape is many things and it just rips apart everything. I understand about not wanting pity, but I just want to congradulate you on being such a strong person. Great Write! I've never seen you on the streets of this town, I've never seen you just hanging around, But you still tell me that you know me... ~Justin Sane |
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songsoftheaftermath Member
since 2002-06-19
Posts 84a world of disarray |
kinda weird how you turned it into something more general at the end- i didnt like how you did that. but its a powerful poem nonetheless...youre a good writer. could the darkness be my friend? |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I meant it to be general. I think anyone who would do such a thing is pitiful and disgusting. Not just the men who did it to me. Thanks for your honesty. I appreciate it very, very much. Thank you all for replying and offering support. I'm glad that I could speak to you all on this level. Even if we're just names on a screen.  Thanks again. [Jaime] "I think I would like to call myself 'the girl who wanted to be God'." Sylvia Plath [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (06-20-2002 07:58 PM).] |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
You can't call those beasts men. They don't deserve the title. And what's worse is that most rapists, if convicted, usually only get a few years. The longest penalty I've heard of, at least in the state of Alabama, is 14 years. Most get 3-5. Then they're let back on the streets. If anything, those bastards deserve to be castrated without anasthesia(sp?), then locked in solitary confinement for the rest of their pitiful little lives. Anyway....incredible poem. Your anger could easily be felt. -Adam |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I think I'd rather just beat them to death and call it a day. Why waste space? Anywho, thank you for the reply. And it's true about the way "justice" is carried out.. very sad... they say "Here mister.. you'll pay for 3 to 5 years for a rape that your victim will be haunted by for the rest of her life. Yes, you've stolen a piece of her that can never be returned. Bad, man! Bad! *slap on the wrist*" [Jaime] "I think I would like to call myself 'the girl who wanted to be God'." Sylvia Plath [This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (06-19-2002 11:06 PM).] |
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cutiepiesugarbabie Member
since 2002-06-07
Posts 110A Cloud In the Sky |
what an AMAZING poem-such a horrible topic-yet still an outstanding poem It's so horrible that such horrible things happen to such talented people *side note* in ancient cultures women used to mate with men then time them to horses and rip them apart... neither sex is perfect but rape should have a much harsher punishment your such a strong person to be able to write then publish a poem about such a tramtic event  |
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BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA |
Yea, the ones that are convicted. But what about the ones who are never even touched cause your pathetic excuse for a mother is to uncareing to believe you when you say it's happened to you. Even when the guy was 18 and you were a minor. Then you get stuck on birth control and he gets away and is free to rome the streets(that are close to your house).-------Sorry, slight moment of rage there. But the justice system is to messed up when it comes to that subject. ~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~ |
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TradingSpaces19 Member
since 2002-08-31
Posts 134Arvada, Colorado |
This is a sad poem but you wrote it really good, you expressed yourself really well. I'm sorry about what happened to you. Keep on writing poetry, even if you just want to express yourself. thank you for sharing. Andrea |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
It irks (most definately understatement of course) me so much that people roam this earth with no conscience nor guilt whatsoever with what they have done to another human being..they don't deserve to breathe the air we breathe..hrm..I'm feeling a bit po'd at the world..but the kewl thing is..they always get it back..woohoo Karma rocks..lol sorry..lighten up the mood..*goes back to being *censored* *  but another good thing is life can only get better...If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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EleanorMoonbaby Member
since 2002-09-02
Posts 202England, UK |
What can I say? I don't know you, so all I can say is that I feel so sad that these things happen. And that this is an astounding piece of poetry. Admittedly, it isn't "nice" reading, but confronts an often ignored subject extremely well. Well done. In the beginning, the Universe was made. This has angered a lot of people and has been widely regarded as a bad move- Douglas Adams |
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layla Member
since 2000-11-19
Posts 74 |
You are a true poet |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Please keep on having the courage to write with the blood of your heart. Emotion is the motion of poetry. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I feel that this was very well done. Absolute emotion on paper...not the prettiest of topics, but I suppose that would be a given? Never get discouraged from writing what you feel. Jenn Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving? |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Jaime, An ugly, emotional, *needed* read (and, I imagine, write) Mikey |
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