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Kosetsu
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since 2001-03-10

Posts 450
Alabama, USA

0 posted 2001-07-16 02:27 PM

Just a lesson for another day,
A lesson there to show the way,
A lesson I should maybe learn,
Just a lesson to show the way,

Just a story to show the way,
A story for another day,
A story I should maybe tell,
Just a story for another day,

Just a battle for another day,
A battle fought to show the way,
A battle I should maybe fight,
Just a battle to show the way.

Just a lesson to show the way,
A lesson for another day,
A lesson I should maybe teach,
Just a lesson for another day.

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Just a little playing around with transposing words and phrases in poetry. Enjoy!
-Kosetsu

"Eat, drink, and be merry, for tomorrow we die." - Shakespeare

[This message has been edited by Kosetsu (edited 07-16-2001).]

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

1 posted 2001-07-16 03:49 PM

Great work Kosetsu, good to see some of your work in here

Zu

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-07-16 07:40 PM

Not your best Adam...but still a good write.
Thanks for the read.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

3 posted 2001-07-16 08:49 PM

i enjoyed it...very nice job on writing this, Adam

im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

4 posted 2001-07-16 10:02 PM

I didn't really like this one, Adam. It was very repititious... It didn't flow well, and lost my interest. Thanks for sharing this with us, though. I hope to see more soon, so keep posting all your work.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning...

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-07-19 01:00 AM

I thought it was ok. Most def. not the best I've read from you, but it wasn't bad.
Hope to see more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

6 posted 2001-07-19 01:06 AM

welli quite enjoyed this kosetsu..i loved the flow it had...played really nicely in my head...hehhee...good experiement!

CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

7 posted 2001-07-19 02:57 AM

I liked this one. But I agree, this isn't the best that I have read of yours. It is still good all the same. Good job.

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

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