Think (..the shortest poem ever)

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Think (..the shortest poem ever)

Otaku
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since 2002-08-13

Posts 39
Western Australia

0 posted 2002-09-06 05:04 AM

Blinded by the cravings of mankind
We are weak, intolerant..

Pathetic

Otaku
Junior Member

since 2002-08-13

Posts 39
Western Australia

1 posted 2002-09-06 05:07 AM

okay this probably doesn't sound like much but....i reckon you needn't write pages and pages of words to deliver a message......i hope the simplicity of this extra-short poem at least makes u think for a while....

it made me think..

"Demon slain, the deed is done...."

EleanorMoonbaby
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since 2002-09-02

Posts 202
England, UK

2 posted 2002-09-06 09:29 AM

Yep, made me think! One of my favourite poems is just called "Poem", and goes like this:
Get your tounge out of my mouth
I'm kissing you goodbye.

Nice, isn't it?!

In the beginning, the Universe was made. This has angered a lot of people and has been widely regarded as a bad move- Douglas Adams

anya
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since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

3 posted 2002-09-06 11:31 AM

yes it made me think, and sometimes simplicity is best
anya

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-09-06 01:56 PM

I've got a shorter one, Otaku (though I loved yours).

It's something I wrote a while back called Motion, and it goes

She is a still moment that seems to move.

Mikey

PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
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5 posted 2002-09-07 01:25 AM

Interesting. *strokes chin*

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
-Abraham Lincoln

PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

6 posted 2002-09-07 01:30 AM

Just a thought....

"Blinded by the cravings of ourselves
We are weak, intolerant..

Pathetic"

or

"Blinded by the cravings of our inner demons
We are weak, intolerant..

Pathetic"

Sincerely,
Titus

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

7 posted 2002-09-07 10:23 AM

Titus:  Why do you wish to change his message?

"Mankind" is a very non-individualistic source from which cravings are derived.  I see mankind as meaning our human nature, something that all of mankind is subject to.

This is nice for thought, if only I didn't think about this kind of thing all the time anyways.  Just as long as it was inspirational for others, though.

Parasite

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