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Teen Poetry #5

Do you even care?

Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

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0 posted 2002-09-05 01:43 AM

Do you even care?
I apologized.
So I screwed up.
It's my life, not yours.
You can watch me pass out
but you can't control me.
You can try to play with my heart,
but I have no sympathy if you get burned.
Sure, be hurt.
Maybe I was looking for a friend.
Maybe I wanted you to be proud of me
for my choice to try to not drink anymore.
I messed up.
Oh well.
I might worry you
but I worry myself
even more.

Marshalzu

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1 posted 2002-09-05 04:55 AM

This is an extremely good poem, I can see that there is a lot of anger stored there, anyway great poem and thank you for sharing

Andrew

"I still feel the pain in my heart, what once was pure is now diluted" - Biffy Cylro

Skyfire

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2 posted 2002-09-05 05:02 AM

Why thank you, Andrew.

Jenn Cirrincione

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3 posted 2002-09-05 08:01 AM

Ahhh I recognize a good bit of this, sounds very familiar to me. I hope it gets better, give this person time, if he cares he'll see the light and come around.

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

anya
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since 2002-07-27

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4 posted 2002-09-05 02:17 PM

hope this vent helped you get things off your chest, anyway I enjoyed reading this, thankyou,
Anya

katherine
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5 posted 2002-09-06 10:42 PM

great poem. don't wory people always come around in the end.

PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

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6 posted 2002-09-07 01:35 AM

Sometimes they don't... an interesting write, Rhonda.

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
-Abraham Lincoln

TradingSpaces19
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since 2002-08-31

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7 posted 2002-09-08 04:02 PM

This is a good poem, and it is a little sad, but other than that it is very good so keep up the good work. Also thank you for sharing it with everyone.

Andrea

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