Skyline (a Sept 11 poem... please read and add your thoughts)

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Skyline (a Sept 11 poem... please read and add your thoughts)

EleanorMoonbaby
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since 2002-09-02

Posts 202
England, UK

0 posted 2002-09-02 03:59 PM

SKYLINE

Take two towers, reaching high
Concrete fingers point at the sky
Scrap metal given the power to fly
A skyline is undone

Hundreds, thousands, injured, dead
An image forms inside my head
A tattered flag that's bloodstained red
And dust that blocks the sun

A sea of broken glass that gleams
A choir of shrill and tortured screams
The Pentagon, ripped at the seams
The tomb of Washington

"Apocalypse" The headlines say
A view destroyed in just one day
In a country that seems far away
The battle's not yet won.

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

1 posted 2002-09-02 04:52 PM

This is an extremely powerful poem on a subject that is still for many quite painful to bring up, I think that you have captured the horror of an entire nation within this peice and it has certainly brought back those dreadful images to my mind. Thank you for sharing this extremely well written peice, It stirred a lot of emotion within me and it made me think about those dreadful events.

Andrew

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LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

2 posted 2002-09-02 04:56 PM

Excellent, very nicely written, and welcome to passions.

I need to organize my thoughts before I continue with this, great write...

~Lisa

anya
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since 2002-07-27

Posts 393
London, UK

3 posted 2002-09-02 05:09 PM

'A skyline is undone', i think that is a very good line in a very powerful poem,
Anya

Mitzi
New Member

since 2002-09-08

Posts 5

4 posted 2002-09-08 06:55 AM

Wow, this was beautiful. I think we should make a book of 9/11 poems.

Otaku
Junior Member

since 2002-08-13

Posts 39
Western Australia

5 posted 2002-09-08 07:46 AM

nice rhyme...

whilst enjoying the 'flow' of this poem it brought back some deep feelings of the 9/11 event......(which is a good thing..)

layla
Member

since 2000-11-19

Posts 74

6 posted 2002-09-08 08:41 PM

wow

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