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Raven Skye
Member

since 2001-03-03

Posts 112
.In a House.

0 posted 2001-07-16 11:43 AM

I don't enjoy this one poetically but it gives me a great feeling remembering the concerts I've been to and soon to go too. So tell me what you think!!

Hang up the phone,
run up the stairs,
throw on some jeans,
punk rawk fiends.

Doors open at seven,
picking you up at six,
gonna sing real loud,
and show your proud.

Dance your cares away,
sing until you go home
let the music take over you
rocking out is what we do!!

Who needs drugs or alcohol
even sex and violence..
when you got a high like this.
Punk Rawk shows, something I'll never miss.

*×´¨`·.×*Raven Skye*×´¨`·.×*
Don't just trust yourself,
learn what parts of yourself to trust.

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

1 posted 2001-07-16 12:13 PM

Hey, This one isnt the most poetically poem your right but it is a good poem i dont know whats up with it but i liked it.

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

Hill's_Chatabox
Junior Member

since 2001-07-10

Posts 46
USA

2 posted 2001-07-16 01:53 PM

Its different, but it's us being each different that makes each and everyone of us special. But other than that I liked it.
~hillary~

Shoot for the moon cause if you miss you'll still end up in the *stars*!!!

Don't tell me that you love me unless you mean it, Beacuse I might do so

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

3 posted 2001-07-16 07:24 PM

Not my favorite of yours, Raven.
But I enjoyed the fun read.

anonymous albert ?

Member Elite

since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

4 posted 2001-07-16 08:40 PM

i think this was different but nice...i enjoyed the read

[This message has been edited by anonymous albert ? (edited 07-16-2001).]

Fading Away

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since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

5 posted 2001-07-16 09:51 PM

As everyone said, this was different from your usual, and wasn't you best.. but it's cool to try new things

I think the only way to fix the rhyming problem is to take out whatever rhyme scheme is there. It doesn't work. It was hardly even noticeable. Other than that, I enjoyed the read, but have seen better from you. Thanks for sharing just the same

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning...

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-07-17 08:01 PM

I really thought you did well on this one hehe.....it shows a different side to you and I liked it.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

7 posted 2001-07-19 03:42 AM

I liked this. Hehe Don't tell anybody, but punk is my favorite kind of music, second to country, anyway.

Punk really does get you going. Good write, I liked it a lot.

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

keoni
Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 850
Up in the mountains in the NFC

8 posted 2001-07-19 11:38 AM

Nice poem. Punk rock shows rule. They have so much energy in them, I don't think anyone could not have fun. Good job on the poem.
Jon

"Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine
"Only God can judge me" Tupac Shakur

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

9 posted 2001-07-19 02:51 PM

Punk rox! My fav music and its me.
great fun poem.

Regina

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