Teen Poetry #5 |
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Tied Up |
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Kosetsu Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 450Alabama, USA |
Wrapped up, In my own confusions, I'm caught up, Held up, By my own delusions, I'm torn up, Ripped up, With my own illusions, I'm bruised up, Hurt up, Covered in contusions, I stand up, Rise up, Against emotional transfusions. "Eat, drink, and be merry, for tomorrow we die." - Shakespeare [This message has been edited by Kosetsu (edited 07-16-2001).] |
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branden726![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
Damn, this is a great poem wow i really like it. Your not a bad poet. All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare! |
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Hill's_Chatabox Junior Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 46USA |
Was a good poem!! hope to read more from you. ~Hillary~ Shoot for the moon cause if you miss you'll still end up in the *stars*!!! |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
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anonymous albert ?![]()
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
simple yet well written...throughout format...i enjoyed it!...great poem, Adam ![]() im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Fading Away![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
Honestly, I didn't really like this as much I have some of your other work. There were phrases throughout the whole poem where the word "up" didn't make sense with the previous word. The format was pretty cool, and I liked the way you used "-sions" words at the end of each stanza... but I didnt like the "... up" lines. Thanks for sharing. I hope to see more soon, so keep posting all your work. --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning... |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this format and style. I've written like this a few times and it always gives off a very powerful and nicely said message, but I always found my poems and poems written in this style to be a bit too easy. Know what I mean? If not haha ignore me, i suck. Anyhow I really liked this one. well done! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
I really liked this one. Locked up in a world you created yourself, in a situation made by yourself. I liked how you expressed that, good job. - Cody - |
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allie Member
since 2001-07-09
Posts 218Australia |
Amazing work~!~!~!~ Really great ALLIE |
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