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Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

0 posted 2002-08-29 10:21 PM

This is a totally different thing than what I usually do with the metaphors and what not but I am not feeling very metaphoric right now, just bummed.

silent paces come behind
glancing back slowly i see
you running and panting
trying to catch up with me

i slow down a little
to let you run beside
me and let out the feelings
you can't seem to hide

no they are not spoken
or whispered softly to
they are said through the eyes
which i look to in through you

softly we go slower
you eyes dancing in the sun
lips slowly part to say
i love you are the one

in pleasure i stop running
and look straight to you
and relize that what you said
was yet but all to true

when i saw you face smiling
i knew it was a fact i know
that every day would be a day
that i would see the show

the show of the century
you smiling dancing face
inspiring me to go ahead
and finsh lifes race

<3 No guy is worth your tears, and when you find one that is, he won't make you cry <3

Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member

since 2002-05-22

Posts 1667
New York

1 posted 2002-08-30 01:33 AM

Hey there Riley-

I like the poem, The feel of the feelings that are being shown are melodious (is that a real word?) They (the feelings) show harmony and grace.

Its as if someone is after your heart and you want them to get there but then you are unsure.

I really like the poem. Good job.

Your Bud
Kels

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

2 posted 2002-08-30 07:56 AM

Kel: Yea, I guess. I have a crush on a guy and its not like any of the others I have had. And well I think he kinda lykes me and I lyke him but I don't know if he wants to go out with me or what. I want him to ask so bad, but then I am scared he actually will. Life is so complicated!

<3 No guy is worth your tears, and when you find one that is, he won't make you cry <3

skyshine

Member Elite

since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

3 posted 2002-08-30 02:33 PM

I like this one Riley! Was this your first attempt at rhyme? If so, it's really good, you should do it more often. Again I hope things are going well for you!

--Beth

Howl at the stars, whisper when you're sleeping, I'll be there to hold you, I'll be there to stop the chills and all the weeping.

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