Teen Poetry #5 |
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Emotion Sickness |
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Luther Junior Member
since 2002-08-15
Posts 17 |
Emotion Sickness The sea of my life is starting to swell Clouds darken the horizon This disease has become my only weakness No medicine can make me well I'm a victim of this emotion sickness Baby your're not making it better You're fueling my fire And my only desire Is to run away from my life I know I shouldn't be thinking this Especially about you But when I'm with you You are not You're some place else Your not yourself And I am left And begin to guess Why are you doing this to me? You can be with him But not with me I know this sounds like jealousy But you know it's true But your actions continue The consequences are not of concern But still I return To the person I love But it's all about you Isn't it!?! When was the last time You gave me a hug A kiss A glance A thought A chance Or asked for a dance. It's all about you ...and him Well I want out. I need to escape Float out the nearest window And never come back Never return to this meaning I lack To the love that I never recieved To the girl that treated me Like I didn't exist And now I'm left I must resist But life is so hard When all of my actions Can't be resolved My only option is to jump But do you want that? Jordan Aarts |
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Riley![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
The rhyming scheme threw me off just a little but then again thats just me because I am tired. Other wise this was a great write. <3 Ri ^ ( I made the little heart thing by myself ![]() |
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Smiles and Cries Junior Member
since 2002-08-23
Posts 16Newrk De |
it couldve been better organized but the message was great and i liked it a lot Have u ever Loved somebody so much it makes u cry? Have u ever needed something so bad u cant sleep at night? Have u ever tried to find the words but |
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Child of the Stars![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Ooh, I like your critique message. I -did- enjoy it. ![]() ![]() ![]() ~Carly "Feelings are not supposed to be logical. Dangerous is the man who has rationalized his emotions." |
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