Stopped Being Me...( Who Am I )

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Teen Poetry #5

Stopped Being Me...( Who Am I )

Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2002-08-23 01:02 AM

"Stopped Being Me ( Who Am I )"
© 2002 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved

Verse 1
You're pictures on the wall, but all it leaves are cold kisses,
And even the weather, agrees with me when I say.
I am suffercating, In my broken dreams and wishes,
And I feel like raining, seems like a storm's headed this way....

Chorus
Could build a "Dustman" on the kitchen floor
You should think I ran a laundry Service,
There's skyscreapers of dishes in the sync
I think my home's become a health risk.
The man I was with you, has said goodbye,
I've stopped being me...Who am I???

Verse 2
There's an old say that goes, true love can't be bought for money,
But here I am anyways trying to write love a check.
Without your arms 'round me, feel like a broken down cheavy,
A Smashed bottle, and a crying child, I'm a total wreck....

Repeat Chorus

[This message has been edited by Hallucination (08-23-2002 01:03 AM).]

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

1 posted 2002-08-23 04:02 PM

Isn't that the way it goes, that sometimes we seem like a completely different person. Well done again, Brian.

~Beth

You look inside my wild mind
never knowing what you'll find
still I want you all the time
yeah I do
'cause you get me
~Michelle Branch

Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

2 posted 2002-08-24 08:49 PM

Sometimes.. it all just goes downhill.. and even sometimes... you don't care to care..

I liked it. For some reason I had this country song playing in my head about this guy who's stressing over his lover and he's staying up all night and trying to keep himself busy when he's falling apart.. I don't mean to offend you (I know some people cringe at country.. sometimes I'm one of them).. I just meant that the lyrics to me sounded good and realistic like the country song I heard.

"you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A.

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

3 posted 2002-08-24 09:47 PM

Loved it. Thanks!

Ri

To the world you maybe a person, but to a person you maybe the world

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