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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding 
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You've done nothing to warrant my hatred. But I still hate you. You've not really done much to hurt me. But I still hurt. They tell me that the cold, impersonal face you put on is fake. But I believe them. Because I've seen the bitter pictures of our past... But I still want to hate you. |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
OOO, good one rhonda, I've definatly felt like this before... great job, Lisa |
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paper doll Member
since 2002-08-04
Posts 133Floating on Uncertainty |
Oh lovely, Rhonda. Hate poems are by far the best that any person can write. You've done a good job on this one. Short and straight to the point.  ~M Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Hmm a most interesting read, at times I felt that some of your lines were a little too long especially "They tell me that the cold, impersonal face you put on is fake" which I thought was a little verbose. Also I got a little confused by "They tell me that the cold, impersonal face you put on is fake. But I believe them." but apart from that I like the repetition that you have used in every other line, anyway extremely good write and thank you for sharing it with us  Andrew Visit my forums @ http://chronicles.proboards4.com/index.cgi |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Reminds me of my ex boyfriend.  Feeling this way sucks majorly. I'm sorry you have to go through it.~Beth You look inside my wild mind |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
...You've done nothing to warrant my hatred. But I still hate you. You've not really done much to hurt me. But I still hurt." I feel you here. Short and emotional, I'm sorry you feel this way. It's not fun. Jenn Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving? |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Lisa - Thanks for the talk last night! Paper doll - Thank you very much; I really appreciate that Andrew - I was hoping someone would get confused by that one. You know my love of being periphrastic. Besides, I wanted people to know what I meant. You're welcome for sharing it with you Beth - It's actually not as bad as it has been in the past; it comes and goes, you know? Jenn - Don't be sorry; it's all a part of growing up, right? |
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