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Just Somewhere I've Been |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa 
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Hi guys, I don’t normally do things like this but I would like to ask you a favor. This poem is centered on the battle with depression I went through about 6 months ago. I ask that you please take the time to read this whole thing though it is rather long and really try to process every word. For those who have been there it will I hope be comforting to know someone else has, and to those who haven’t, it might open your eyes to someone close to you who has a problem. Thanks, and please tell me what this meant to you as it means a lot to me. Have you been there? Beware if you haven’t This brisk moving pageant Can whisk you with hands that Throw you in the corner Of your mind and mourner With no more Intentions Than just moving foreword There’s no foreword Just a novel Idea That you’re suddenly there In a place where you stare At the things that you fear In the face And they trace Round your mind Like the gears That are grinding your life To a sharp abrupt halt It’s my fault You repeat To the beat Of your heart Of your vault Where you lock Up the pain With these walls Of concrete And it rains Every day Only where You can see So you pray To a god You believe Has no say In your life But just may Help you get Through the day While you sit Staring down At your feet And sometimes You just cry You know why But you don’t And you wont Let yourself Picture how you could die But you do It’s not new Just to you So you’re scared Cause your closer Than most are To taking your life But who knows? Only you Can see through Your façade Though a few Say that you Have been acting Quite odd I am fine You reply Flashing signs Through your eyes Thinking why Damn it why Do I break down the lines That these people keep throwing I keep them from knowing Just how far into me This thing has been growing Until you cant take it No more Can you fake it You make it Break down Hoping that you can shake it By screaming out loud That you're dying inside And was wearing a shroud And the whole time had lied To yourself And your friends And your family too Thinking that If they knew They’d be Ashamed of you Only then to realize In the look in their eyes That no matter what happens They’ll always love you So they go get you help And things start to get better And you feel yourself Start to overcome weather Inside of your head Into bright sunny skies Then the day comes When you can look back with own eyes And be thankful its over And you made it through So that you will be able To help those like you Thanks guys, Peace [This message has been edited by Kevin (08-15-2002 02:47 PM).] |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
 [This message has been edited by LCBS (08-14-2002 01:13 PM).] |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
yo, what's up kid? I tihnk we've all been there before. Glad to hear that you're better now. The important thing is to remeber that there are those who love us and whom we love. Powerful poem and with a great flow (I'm not a big emminem fan, but the flow kind of reminded me of "The Way I am"  ) Check out my poetry here: |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
I don't quite know what to say, rarely has a poem spoken to me like this one has, I have read it four times now and I do not doubt I will read it again, you are not the only one to have been there, I went completly off the rails when I was about 14 and did lots of stupid things and sunk into a deppressive cycle, but hey I got help and began to sort myself out and am now alot happier than I was. But anyway back to the poem two bits in particular spoke to me, firstly 'There's no forward', I know that feeling, like there is nowhere left to go, no way to continue. Also 'start to overcome the weather inside your head', that is so well put, describes the feeling perfectly. I loved it all, I'm sorry if I gushed a bit here but hey this just spoke to me. I haven't had the courage to write about my own depressive peroid, I can't seem to put it into words. Well done and thankyou so much for sharing this piece Anya |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
wow, this was very deep and meaningful. the message behind it, as you said, is an important one and you portrayed it very well. -still- while keeping a great flow and rhyme scheme. this one is going into my library. we've all been there. im thankful you found your light out. keep writing. tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Thanks for the input guys, anya that foreward line actually has a double meaning it does mean it seems like theres no future, but also the whole foreword/novel appeal I was going for As if to say...theres no prelimanary preperation for what happens like a foreward to a book your just suddenly there it happens all at once I hope that doesn't get lost on people But im glad you could connect with it |
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*~p.r.i.n.c.e.s.s.~* Junior Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 38 |
Hey, I agree with anya on this. Beautiful. I have never read a poem like this before. Not one that made me feel like that. I just wanted to cry for you. I know what you went through and so do so many people out there. I hope you're over this though. Anyway, great poem. Love, ~*~Brittney~*~ |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
bump |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
This basically put words to the exact emotions I was feeling earlier this year... however I never got help, I was lucky enough to have it sort of fade away as I got out of school. But I must say that this hit to the very core of me. Awesome job here, in fact so awesome it's going into my library... I loved all the metaphors that you wrapped it up in. |
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mistic Member
since 2001-05-06
Posts 233Idaho, U.S.A. |
forgot to add it earlier.... |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
wow dude i totally luved this, i could relate 2 it so much, i agree with master about the whole eminem thing goin on, this was a awesum and powerful piece, great job!!  ~Ur feelings never change, u just learn 2 hide them~ |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
Ty kindly guys, I'm glad so many could identify with this, See ya round the blue kev |
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paper doll Member
since 2002-08-04
Posts 133Floating on Uncertainty |
Glad to hear you came out of it, Kevin. I'd say more but I'd rather not. Thanks for sharing. ~M Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality. |
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Otaku Junior Member
since 2002-08-13
Posts 39Western Australia |
Kevin, i don't know you..but i know exactly what it was like to be in a deep, deep depression. It grows and grows inside until you just collapse on your bedroom floor.....that hurting feeling inside that just eats away your soul...and the morbid thoughts that endlessly parade the night.. thanks for sharing this poem...it took a lot of courage to do so and you have our respect! "Demon slain, the deed is done...." |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
"It’s my fault You repeat To the beat Of your heart Of your vault Where you lock Up the pain With these walls Of concrete And it rains Every day Only where You can see" "I am fine You reply Flashing signs Through your eyes Thinking why Damn it why Do I break down the lines That these people keep throwing I keep them from knowing Just how far into me This thing has been growing" Oh my goodness... I never realised that other people went through the same things... Thanks for this, Kevin |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
*sigh* i missed you**You can't always trust the people you want to** |
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