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Nazera29
Junior Member

since 2002-08-14

Posts 34
Connecticut

0 posted 2002-08-17 12:53 PM

Last night
You met me at my car
Said your goodbye
And stole my air with your lips
Took me by such suprise that I couldn't
Show off my years of practice for this moment
I was back in seventh grade in her basement
Playing spin the bottle with boys too old for first kisses
I started to doubt there was someone like you
Years of fake kisses with fake people
Until now I had never left my jaw on the pavement
It was over before I could start thinking about it
I leaned on my car
After you said your goodbye
And watched you pull away
Last night

*We are the hero in our own story*

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

1 posted 2002-08-17 01:03 AM

"Took me by such suprise that I couldn't
Show off my years of practice for this moment"
Personally I hate it when that happens

I love the way you've put it into words! I'll look out for more of your work, cause I like this one

LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

2 posted 2002-08-17 01:04 AM

Awww this was sweet Jess, I loved the line about leaving your jaw on the pavement. Great imagery there...years of practincing, eh?

~Lisa

fearing-laughter
Senior Member

since 2001-04-24

Posts 605
land of cheese (Wisconsin)

3 posted 2002-08-17 04:09 AM

hey,
aww this is really sweet, kinda makes everyone nostalgic. nicely done.
-bergundy-

"crack my head open, on your kitchen floor. to prove to you, that i have brains." -Alkaline Trio

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

4 posted 2002-08-17 12:33 PM

My first kiss sucked...lol
And be careful as kisses can lead to this evil thing called mono...*sniffffffff

Cool poem tho

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

Kevin

Senior Member

since 1999-11-02

Posts 729
Torrington, Ct, Usa

5 posted 2002-08-17 02:14 PM

I once thought I Had mono for 4 months straight, turns out I was just really bored.

-mike meyers, waynes world-

Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

6 posted 2002-08-17 02:24 PM

LOL
Until you actually get mono...you just have no idea. Everything hurts. It hurts to swallow, you're always feverish or sweating or both. Most of the time you're tired and weak, and you feel like you have a really ugly flu. I wish this on no one.

God, I wish I were just really bored. Yuck.

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

Tiger
Junior Member

since 2002-08-18

Posts 24
Queensland, Australia

7 posted 2002-08-18 05:23 AM

WOW JESS.

I think your poem discribes every teenage girls thoughts on the long awaited first kiss. I can relate to yours about the spin the bottle stuff, and still yet to find that one true first kiss. Very imaginative.
Keep up the good work

Nazera29
Junior Member

since 2002-08-14

Posts 34
Connecticut

8 posted 2002-08-19 11:28 PM

thanks guys, but just to clear it up:

it wasnt really about my FIRST kiss, i think most of you got that, but it was like tiger said, your first REAL kiss... and kevin, i like the line about mono... it will really help me in my poetry.. :-p hehehe, hey everyone, it was kevins birthday a few days ago! happy birthday kev!

*We are the hero in our own story*

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