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PoetryIsLife

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0 posted 2002-08-15 12:53 PM

A killing desire,
suicide for hire.
A love beyond sense.

No one understands.
No one understands.

Sacrificing oneself,
mutilation key;
blood seeking souls.

No one understands.
No one understands.

Two beams, one sword,
a multitude of thorns.
A killing desire.

No one understands.
No one understands.

PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

1 posted 2002-08-15 12:54 PM

I know I'm not around here much anymore; thought I'd drop by, say hello, and throw a dark into the ring.

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
-Abraham Lincoln

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

2 posted 2002-08-15 01:44 AM

ummm ti hun i think this is to dark for here i dunno we'll see

you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

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Ann Arbor, MI

3 posted 2002-08-15 11:23 AM

Titus! Welcome back! This was dark indeed...gave me those strange chilly feelings. I still enjoyed it though.. I hope to see you around here some more. Maybe? Please? Pretty-please? I'll give you candy...

~Carly

"Feelings are not supposed to be logical. Dangerous is the man who has rationalized his emotions."
~David Borenstein

[This message has been edited by Child of the Stars (08-15-2002 11:30 AM).]

PoetryIsLife

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since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
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4 posted 2002-08-15 03:45 PM

Hey Carly.

Candy?

Just a note for everyone who reads this: to avoid confusion about my meaning, read this piece with a religious/Christian slant. It might make more sense when one reads it that way.

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
-Abraham Lincoln

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

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5 posted 2002-08-15 04:37 PM

Yep....sort of what I thought considering this verse:

"Two beams, one sword,
a multitude of thorns.
A killing desire."

(and I DO like this) It would also make an interesting discussion thread, methinks.

paper doll
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since 2002-08-04

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6 posted 2002-08-16 12:36 PM

Oh this is fantastic.

Strong all the way through and it can be interpreted on so many levels. It's nice to see a different view on religion.

Very much enjoyed. Thanks for the read.

~M

Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality.

Kit McCallum

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7 posted 2002-08-16 06:52 AM

This is a powerful piece Titus ... hard hitting from the metaphor you've used here. There is much to ponder from the religeous vantage you've explored within this poem. Well done.

Best wishes,
/Kit

Otaku
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since 2002-08-13

Posts 39
Western Australia

8 posted 2002-08-16 07:55 AM

i like dark poems....your poem, here, is something i would have liked to have written..

Great job!

PoetryIsLife

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9 posted 2002-08-16 02:21 PM

"A killing desire,
suicide for hire.
A love beyond sense."

As a Christian, I believe in Jesus Christ, and believe He had a killing desire, one to sacrifice himself for all, though, not all choose to acknowledge it. A "love beyond sense."

"No one understands.
No one understands."

Here, I am saying so many don't understand the Christian faith.

"Sacrificing oneself,
mutilation key;
blood seeking souls."

During the crucifixion, He was mutilated, and beaten beyond sense - thus, the first two lines. The third, yes, quite dark is in reference to, as a Christian, I believe all souls need the death/blood of Christ for salvation.

"No one understands.
No one understands."

"Two beams, one sword,
a multitude of thorns.
A killing desire."

Two beams = the Cross. One sword = the soldier's who made sure He died before His burial/ressurection. The thorns, His crown of thorns.

Hope that helps...

Sincerely,
Titus

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
-Abraham Lincoln

Dark Enchantress
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10 posted 2002-08-16 04:30 PM

I didn't take it as a Christian kind of poem, but I see where it comes from now. Very interesting.

"you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A.

Mysteria

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11 posted 2002-08-17 02:50 AM

What a fantastic examply of an extremely well done dark poem and you couldn't have picked better subject matter. Enjoyed this.

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