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Dark Enchantress
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0 posted 2002-08-14 09:50 AM


The morning sun is shinning in through the
Window to my bedroom

But the night is here too, our night is here too

I put a sweater and socks on,
But I’m still chilled to the very core of
My being

That which is real seems to only exist
In your presence and that which falls apart
Happens when we decide to fade out

Fade out
Fade out

And just fade…

I guess I’m far beyond the shade
Beyond having a bit of a taste
I want to taste your every move
And sound

Your every apparition
Every time you touch ground

But now I’m crying
For my fate has been torn like my
Heart from my chest and cast into
Thorns

Now I’m struggling with my breath
It seems I don’t need the pills at all, babe

Because I’m far beyond the shade

"you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A.

© Copyright 2002 Morgana - All Rights Reserved
Kevin
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1 posted 2002-08-14 10:47 AM


From the very first line of this I was in the room with you DE, So much of this translates very well

Thanks for the read

Master
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2 posted 2002-08-14 02:36 PM


Hey DE,

sorry that I haven't been responding to too many of your poems. I know little about free verse and I rarely know what to say. In all honesty, I find your poems original and with a unique flow. I like that! Thanks

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3 posted 2002-08-14 04:29 PM


"That which is real seems to only exist
In your presence and that which falls apart
Happens when we decide to fade out "

"I guess I’m far beyond the shade
Beyond having a bit of a taste
I want to taste your every move"

"But now I’m crying
For my fate has been torn like my
Heart from my chest and cast into
Thorns"

Well adapted to verse, my Memina. Very well adapted. Knowing before I read this what I do, and reading it, I can see it all the more clearly, all the more rightly, all the more perfectly. A touching write, one of longing, desire.... mostly, purely: chaos.

Talk to you tonight, memina.

Sincerely,
SaVerite


"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
            -Abraham Lincoln

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (08-14-2002 04:30 PM).]

PoetryIsLife
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4 posted 2002-08-14 04:32 PM


Where did the title come from? I'm not sure how it applies... is there some history of Augustine I'm unaware of?

Sincerely,
SaVerite

"I'll prepare myself, and one day my time will come."
            -Abraham Lincoln

Dark Enchantress
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5 posted 2002-08-14 04:45 PM


Augustine is the name of a faery. It is said that she had a vision of her true love and she chose to spend a portion of eternity in a vigil of hope for the arrival of her love. Although I perhaps chose a faery far too hopefull and optimistic..

Thank you guys for the replies. Always appreciated. And Master - shame on you! You know you're supposed to reply to all of my poems. Kidding of course. That you even bother every once and a while is nice..


"you don't need one of these to let me inside of you" T.A.

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (08-14-2002 04:49 PM).]

xEmperorEmber
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6 posted 2002-08-15 02:39 AM


Whats this about? BWAHAHAHA... or something intelligent,l,,
fearing-laughter
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7 posted 2002-08-15 02:51 AM


hey,
kind of interesting to read a poem by you that isn't full of great images that are sometimes difficult to interpret.  i especially liked the last line, well done in my opinion.
-bergundy-

maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio-

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8 posted 2002-08-16 05:18 AM


"Now I’m struggling with my breath
It seems I don’t need the pills at all, babe

Because I’m far beyond the shade"

Of all the lines in this piece, this is the one I seriously connected with. Obviously it has to be taken in context but those applied to another situation are mind blowing.

I loved this piece, Jaime. You've got such a flair and grace with your words that it's impossible not to be captivated. Thanks for posting them.

~M

Imagination=nostalgia for the past, the absent; it is the liquid solution in which art develops the snapshots of reality.

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