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Hallucination Member
since 2001-03-18
Posts 419 |
"Beautiful Dawn" © 2002 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved Beautiful Dawn With the twillight eyes, Lies on the cold floor In dusty old white. Crying blue moon tears Cause Mr. Right said: "Dawn, I'm greyhound bound, Please try to forget.... All about me and what we had It's not like a threw memories From an entire life away... We were married for two months And I always knew that there was Something missing til this day" Beautiful Dawn With the long Brown hair, Is slowly making Her way to the chair. A bottle of pills Is slipped in her hand, Takes them one by one cause of a lost plan... She expected him to be there Whenever the times got real tough But instead he just ran away... They bought a small house in the hills With a great view of the city But she regrets it every day... Beautiful Dawn Whose beyond repair, Is found just in time Cause her neighbours care. She's doing better She's starting anew, Bought an apartmeant She's gonna get through... Dawn is playing at Eddies bar Round the corner from Taco bells Every other Monday evening... Join me for some beer and whiskey Down here at old Eddie's bar and Listen to beautiful Dawn sing... Beautiful Dawn Sings 'bout her lost love, Look what you've done You've picked yourslf up... [This message has been edited by Hallucination (08-13-2002 08:51 PM).] |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
great poem i really liked it hope to see more from you. tks for the read. robin you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey, this was definetly an interesting piece. at first i thought you were gonna have the whole she-comitted-suicide-with-successd thing, but i was really glad when your story of 'beautiful dawn' turned out okay in the end. -bergundy- maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio- |
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