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Kielo
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0 posted 2002-04-02 05:20 PM



Children are we;
Children I say-
or at least that is the mask we wear.
Dragged into adulthood
by experiences we, as children,
should never have had.
We are ancient,
aloof from those around us-
they would never understand
that we are not alike.

They are children,
sheltered and innocent,
and they believe they know everything.
They do not see their shallowness,
thier immaturity,
their selfish world
of me first, me first, me first.

We, the ancient,
are shattered,
a glass filled too full.
We are in constant pain.
Things past haunt us.
We hide it, of course,
putting on a facade
of self-confidence,
assurance,
understanding.
Our self-confidence is merely an act.
We are sure of nothing.
We understand nothing of life,
and know it.

The children,
they deceive themselves.
They belive they understand all.
I will hurt for them
the day they realize their error.

We, the ancient
see all,
absorb all,
try to help each other.
We do not understand ourselves.
Other see more clearly.
In this way,
blind,
but with full knowledge of our blindness,
we grope through life,
void of hope.

For all our differences,
in one way we, the ancients
are childlike.
We still feel pain like children,
and it tears at our hearts,
wrenching bitter silent tears
from deep within our souls.
So still I cry-
Children, are we.
Children, I say.

© Copyright 2002 Jeremiah Leonard - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-04-03 12:21 PM


Ah but we cannot be children forever. After all, where would we gain our independence and sense of responsibility from?

Interesting write. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.

~AF~

"Sometimes the only way to stay sane is to go a little crazy." - Susanna Kaysen

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2 posted 2002-04-03 01:16 AM


This gave me a lot to think about which i like. I do believe children, especially now, are stripped from their innocence way too early but i dont know if there is any way to prevent it with the way society is going..true piece in many ways..well done

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3 posted 2002-04-04 04:34 PM


A very true, and very deep peace.

I must say I enjoyed it.

While the flow at times was off by the difference in line length, the poem had a nice overall length and a dark and saddened feel to it.

"The children,
they deceive themselves.
They belive they understand all.
I will hurt for them
the day they realize their error."

Children today.... it's a battle to let them enjoy their innocence as long as they can. A battle many a parent isn't willing to fight.

"of me first, me first, me first."

Aw, how much of society is based on the philosophy.

A splendid piece. If you perhaps made the lines more equal and length, as well as the stanzas, to give it a more organized feel... other then that. I loved it.

~ Titus

"Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter"

Kielo
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4 posted 2002-04-05 11:39 AM


Thank you! I'm glad you like... Just to clarify, this was written mostly from a depressed point of view, of people who are 10 to 17 or so, and are as mature as someone 50 because of something that has happened to them. Circumstances beyond their control.

Humm... I can't remember what I was going to say... Talk to you all later! I love you!

I LOVE YOU! *kisses you* hehehe...

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5 posted 2003-01-10 01:18 AM


can't believe I missed this one... into my library
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