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Shattered Innocence
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Shattered Innocence |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
Children are we; Children I say- or at least that is the mask we wear. Dragged into adulthood by experiences we, as children, should never have had. We are ancient, aloof from those around us- they would never understand that we are not alike. They are children, sheltered and innocent, and they believe they know everything. They do not see their shallowness, thier immaturity, their selfish world of me first, me first, me first. We, the ancient, are shattered, a glass filled too full. We are in constant pain. Things past haunt us. We hide it, of course, putting on a facade of self-confidence, assurance, understanding. Our self-confidence is merely an act. We are sure of nothing. We understand nothing of life, and know it. The children, they deceive themselves. They belive they understand all. I will hurt for them the day they realize their error. We, the ancient see all, absorb all, try to help each other. We do not understand ourselves. Other see more clearly. In this way, blind, but with full knowledge of our blindness, we grope through life, void of hope. For all our differences, in one way we, the ancients are childlike. We still feel pain like children, and it tears at our hearts, wrenching bitter silent tears from deep within our souls. So still I cry- Children, are we. Children, I say. |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Ah but we cannot be children forever. After all, where would we gain our independence and sense of responsibility from? Interesting write. I enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing. ~AF~ "Sometimes the only way to stay sane is to go a little crazy." - Susanna Kaysen |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This gave me a lot to think about which i like. I do believe children, especially now, are stripped from their innocence way too early but i dont know if there is any way to prevent it with the way society is going..true piece in many ways..well done iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
A very true, and very deep peace. I must say I enjoyed it. While the flow at times was off by the difference in line length, the poem had a nice overall length and a dark and saddened feel to it. "The children, they deceive themselves. They belive they understand all. I will hurt for them the day they realize their error." Children today.... it's a battle to let them enjoy their innocence as long as they can. A battle many a parent isn't willing to fight. "of me first, me first, me first." Aw, how much of society is based on the philosophy. A splendid piece.  If you perhaps made the lines more equal and length, as well as the stanzas, to give it a more organized feel... other then that. I loved it.  ~ Titus "Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter" |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
 Thank you! I'm glad you like... Just to clarify, this was written mostly from a depressed point of view, of people who are 10 to 17 or so, and are as mature as someone 50 because of something that has happened to them. Circumstances beyond their control.Humm... I can't remember what I was going to say... Talk to you all later! I love you! I LOVE YOU! *kisses you* hehehe... |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
can't believe I missed this one... into my library |
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