Teen Poetry #5 |
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The Last Game |
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Dustin462 Junior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 23Selah, WA |
THE LAST GAME “Catch the damn ball” The voice said An oldman Watching the football game Waiting for his team to get the ring He always enjoyed football He always enjoyed family He always enjoyed the grandchildren One grandson was with him at this time Watching the game together The grandson enjoyed this time Except for His grandfather was also enjoying this time With his grandson And His last game |
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Local Parasite![]()
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
This is very different, in terms of topic... at the surface it appears to be much simpler than it is. I love that in a poem... complexity hidden by simplicity of topic. Once again, I commend your style... You have a lot of talent. If you had an "encourages critiques" flag activated, I could give more insight, but I'm going to cut it to a close here, to avoid anything bad... ![]() Parasite |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
Awesome... At first, it seems like a typical football game on TV... But then it's way more then that. Very cool. Nice write. - Cody - |
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