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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
As I sit in the dark studing the wall. No one's there,no one at all. A tear ran down my cheek. As i tryed to find the courage to speak. No one's around to hear me cry. I feel so alone,I don't know why. Trully being alone would only make things worse. That i was bestood with this horrible curse. That No one would compare, To the pain i went through. "Knowing you were alone,and no one was with you" No one went through as much heartbreak as I did. Even though i'm just a kid. I'm all alone and always will be. As the darkness surrounds me I can't escape, I cannot see! ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ Please be honest and tell me what you think. Wanting him is hard to get.Loving him is hard to regret.Losing him is hard to accept.But with all the hurt ifelt,letting go is the most painful yet |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I rather enjoyed the message, for me the poem read fast, if that makes sense? (its all good) I will offer you a hug and a smile for brighter days...keep your chin up....  HUGSSSLauren~ The ocean looks like a thousand diamonds strewn across a blue blanket |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
First, I do like this. I felt that the flow was a little off though; easily remedied, as all you'd have to do is take out some periods in key places. Once again, I like this, and I feel that you have the makings of a good poem, if you can get the kinks worked out. |
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Pollita Member
since 2002-07-25
Posts 220the unknown realm of insanity |
aww thank you everyone.Ya and lauren thanks for the hugs.I really will try to work on the "kinks" but i don't know what you mean. |
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