The Echoes of what once was Love.

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Teen Poetry #5

The Echoes of what once was Love.

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

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Lurking

0 posted 2002-08-01 05:39 PM

The Echoes of what once was Love.

Blue skies drain away
bleak prospects are assured
as happiness is an illusion
sewn through sweet whispers
beneath the bitter screaming
lie the lies
and echoes of what once was
Love

In the darkness
     vermillion tears
fall onto the ground
          where loneliness
stabs deep into the heart
           a poisoned knife bearing resent
and echoes of what once was
Love

"If you are afraid of wolves, stay out of the woods"

J.V. Stalin

[This message has been edited by Marshalzu (08-01-2002 05:52 PM).]

Jenn Cirrincione

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1 posted 2002-08-01 05:50 PM

This is an interesting poem. I like it.
Nice to see you writing Zu- I'm just sorry it's so dispairing.

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...

2 posted 2002-08-01 07:04 PM

yes i agree with jenn. i liked this.

~Ultimately, we are all dead~Proximo

PoetryIsLife

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...in my boxers...

3 posted 2002-08-01 09:03 PM

Good write, Andrew. Good write.

~Titus

"They say that a hero can save us. I'm not gonna stand here and wait..."

-Chad Kroger

Kandi
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North of Hell

4 posted 2002-08-02 01:07 AM

Very well written - the imagery is what makes it so powerful, methinks

The day you were born, you were born free
That is your privilege.

mistic
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since 2001-05-06

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5 posted 2002-08-02 02:04 AM

this is a really great piece, it really fits my mood right now...

anya
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since 2002-07-27

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London, UK

6 posted 2002-08-02 04:39 AM

I really loved this, i thought it was very beautifully written and it was so full of emotion,thankyou
anya

chasing rain
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Canada

7 posted 2002-08-02 11:53 PM

Zu, didn't see you before, but I shall be back. ^^

-Leah-

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