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*~p.r.i.n.c.e.s.s.~*
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since 2002-07-25
Posts 38


0 posted 2002-07-27 04:32 PM


**i dunno how good any of these are, but i have to have somewhere to post them, even if they suck, lol. thanx 4 readin' em tho!**\

I look at this picture of you and me
Wondering where we went wrong
How could things get so bad
When they were good for so long?

I still love you so much
And I can't let you go
But you've hurt me for the last time
And I can't take this anymore.

At first i thought i deserved it
And you were the best that i could get
But i deserve so much better
Though I haven't found him yet.

Of course you know I'll forgive you
For all the pain you put me through
But I'll never forget,
What that pain made me do....

I don't regret our time together
Although now it hurts so bad,
But I'd never go through it again-
This time I won't take you back.

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Local Parasite
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Transylconia, Winnipeg
1 posted 2002-07-27 08:50 PM


These are popular feelings for a poet.  Despair, disdain... but you finish your poem with a statement of independence, of a learning experience.  So sad that these lessons need be learned so bitterly.

What an excellent moral conclusion to this poem.  It's important to understand this sort of experience.  Well done.

Parasite

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Member Rara Avis
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Posts 7665
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2 posted 2002-07-30 05:00 PM


It's always nice to write about our personal experiences
You have shown it very well
I know a lot of people chose to write this form
but I never get tired of it
beautiful expression of one's self
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.


anya
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since 2002-07-27
Posts 393
London, UK
3 posted 2002-07-30 05:17 PM


oh I really liked this one, i can really relate and this poem is a great transcription of those feelings, well done
anya

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