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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
Riding my bike, Down the hill, Going just a little too fast, It brings to mind, That song you tried to teach me, I could never get that last chord right, I remember the words, I sing it to myself, If I don't slow down, I know I'm going to fall, Just as I tried to brake, I came falling forward, The blood flows, From my fresh wounds, It brings to mind, That one time you tried to make me understand, I could never get why you had to leave, I remember your words, I say them over to myself at night: 'If you don't slow down, you're going to fall.' "Now I know I wanna kill you like only a best friend could."-Brand New [This message has been edited by StellarChica (07-19-2002 10:53 PM).] |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
Wow~ I really liked how you brought this all together in the end...the double meaning of "if you don't slow down, you're going to fall" was really great! Good job! ~Lisa To everything there is a season... |
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sillywilly Junior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 33oklahoma |
i really liked your poem but please explain your quote to me. i like it but what do you think when you read it? |
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StellarChica Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207floating down a river... |
You mean my signature quote? Ok well when I read I see it as hating someone so much because they were your best friend but then they betrayed you...In my head I know how I see it but it's hard to write...hmm..I think I take it as 'Only I can kill you with this much passion and hatred because you're my best friend.' If that makes any sense to you..My sig quote now is from the same song. Thanks for reading my poem  "You left a phrase from ties you severed when you say 'Best friends means friends forever.'"-Brand New [This message has been edited by StellarChica (07-22-2002 11:46 AM).] |
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