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LCBS
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0 posted 2002-07-06 09:46 PM


* I just want you to know (if it makes a difference) that this is about dependency and not suicide...so I hope it inside the guidelines.  If not, I'm sorry for the waste of a post*


A little orange bottle
Your dream solution
Just pop a few pills
It’s her self pollution
And you swear by the doses
Say its the miracle cure
But she can’t get enough
And she just can’t endure
Unbearable
Just stop the pain
Pop another pill
Her muscles cocaine
And she begs the doctors
Please make it all end
Just one prescription
Her only best friend

Unbearable
Just make it all end...


A little orange bottle
Your dream solution
Just pop a few pills
It's her self pollution
And try not to look
Straight into her eyes
As she begs you for more
Dressed in pain's disguise
Unbeareable
Just stop the pain
Pop another pill
Her muscles Cocaine
All she want's is one night
but she can't afford peace
Ends it with one willful swallow
Her pain's release

[This message has been edited by LCBS (07-06-2002 11:25 PM).]

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since 2001-04-24
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1 posted 2002-07-06 11:33 PM


hey,
i don't know if this is in the pip guidelines or not, i don't think so, but i've never really taken the time to read it completely.  even if it is, it is still a really good piece.  it is sad that there are people with this problem, and i hope you truly aren't one of the many. if you are, seek help.  other then that...great piece. thanks for sharing.
-bergundy

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2 posted 2002-07-07 12:07 PM


That was such a Great poem. I hope if this poem is based on truth this person can get better,nice poem thanks.

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3 posted 2002-07-07 12:43 PM



Kit McCallum
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4 posted 2002-07-07 09:27 AM


This is definitely "not a waste of a post", Lisa.

What I see within your poem, is someone who is struggling with legitimate prescription drugs to ease what appears to be a great deal of physical pain. You've explored the topic, and not condoned mis-use of drugs, but rather, have pointed out the dilemma … the negative feelings of "self pollution" and yet, the agony of wanting to numb chronic pain.

I hope the person you speak about is able to get additional medical opinions, and hopefully, an answer to ease their pain.

Best wishes,
/Kit

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5 posted 2002-07-07 11:25 AM


Really well done Lisa. Sad that for some people, this is reality. I'm glad to hear it isn't about you, but *hugs* to the person it is about.

~sky

You look inside my wild mind
never knowing what you'll find
still I want you all the time
yeah I do
'cause you get me
~Michelle Branch

SavingGrace
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since 2002-05-31
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6 posted 2002-07-07 10:45 PM


i really enjoyed reading this, as with a lot of your writing that you are posting lately. keep up the good work!

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MidnightSon
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since 2002-05-15
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7 posted 2002-07-08 03:11 PM


i know this problem all too well...

well written, lisa.

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sillywilly
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since 2002-06-25
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oklahoma
8 posted 2002-07-08 05:44 PM


This is a great read. Its really powerful and opens my eyes to the real world out there that i haven't experienced before. I hope everything works out.
Deep_Inside
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9 posted 2002-07-08 08:16 PM


the poem was good. i hate pills they mess up everything.
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