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Just make it all end |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
* I just want you to know (if it makes a difference) that this is about dependency and not suicide...so I hope it inside the guidelines. If not, I'm sorry for the waste of a post* A little orange bottle Your dream solution Just pop a few pills It’s her self pollution And you swear by the doses Say its the miracle cure But she can’t get enough And she just can’t endure Unbearable Just stop the pain Pop another pill Her muscles cocaine And she begs the doctors Please make it all end Just one prescription Her only best friend Unbearable Just make it all end... A little orange bottle Your dream solution Just pop a few pills It's her self pollution And try not to look Straight into her eyes As she begs you for more Dressed in pain's disguise Unbeareable Just stop the pain Pop another pill Her muscles Cocaine All she want's is one night but she can't afford peace Ends it with one willful swallow Her pain's release [This message has been edited by LCBS (07-06-2002 11:25 PM).] |
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fearing-laughter Senior Member
since 2001-04-24
Posts 605land of cheese (Wisconsin) |
hey, i don't know if this is in the pip guidelines or not, i don't think so, but i've never really taken the time to read it completely. even if it is, it is still a really good piece. it is sad that there are people with this problem, and i hope you truly aren't one of the many. if you are, seek help. other then that...great piece. thanks for sharing. -bergundy maybe i'll catch fire, something nice to warm me. something pure to burn away the darkness, that hides inside my mind. -alkaline trio- |
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Who iis she Junior Member
since 2002-05-14
Posts 41Some where over the rainbow |
That was such a Great poem. I hope if this poem is based on truth this person can get better,nice poem thanks. If history has taught us one true thing is that no Species can last forever... |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
This is definitely "not a waste of a post", Lisa.  What I see within your poem, is someone who is struggling with legitimate prescription drugs to ease what appears to be a great deal of physical pain. You've explored the topic, and not condoned mis-use of drugs, but rather, have pointed out the dilemma … the negative feelings of "self pollution" and yet, the agony of wanting to numb chronic pain. I hope the person you speak about is able to get additional medical opinions, and hopefully, an answer to ease their pain. Best wishes, /Kit |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Really well done Lisa. Sad that for some people, this is reality. I'm glad to hear it isn't about you, but *hugs* to the person it is about.  ~sky You look inside my wild mind |
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SavingGrace Junior Member
since 2002-05-31
Posts 26not yet found |
i really enjoyed reading this, as with a lot of your writing that you are posting lately. keep up the good work! ~*Grace*~ |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
i know this problem all too well... well written, lisa. it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown |
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sillywilly Junior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 33oklahoma |
This is a great read. Its really powerful and opens my eyes to the real world out there that i haven't experienced before. I hope everything works out. |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
the poem was good. i hate pills they mess up everything. |
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