here's my second poem guys:-)

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FAITHy
New Member

since 2002-06-26

Posts 9
NE

0 posted 2002-07-03 04:29 AM

hey everyone! this isnt about me...i kind of wrote it about my friend and what she went through. I hope it doesnt offend anyone or anything :-) I dont want all of my poems on here to be like depressing but this one and the one before it was kinda of like that. Sorry i will try and write some happy ones soon lol. be sure to tell me what you think! thanx ~faithy

he changed me, theres no point to deny
he took out my inocence, and replaced it with lies
how did he change me, how did he get in?
how did i fall for it, even tho i knew it was a sin
i loved him so much, he probably loved me too
but how did i let him manipulate me and make me think it was what i wanted to do?
i held out for so long, i really did try
all he left me feeling in the end was a fool, and tears at which i cried
being with him was the biggest mistake yet
because loving someone shouldnt leave you with regrets
but i have regrets, i didnt wait like i wanted
instead of my heart, it was my brain i should have trusted
now i feel dirty, like a (edit by moderator) or a (edit by moderator)
but its not like i let any guy do this before
i trusted him, i thought i would be ready
but all it did was make me feel ashamed and (edit by moderator)
for once i thought i had made the right choice
i thought he was different, not like other boys
i feel like i was raped, but i gave him the okay
my mind was saying no, but my emotions got in the way
i loved him so, everything about him felt so right
but if he was really right i wouldnt be alone crying here tonight
after he got what he wanted, what he had waited so long for
he left me alone, ashamed and ignored
everyone was right when they said be careful, he lies
i should have realized it the first time he made me cry
now i cant trust guys, i cant let love in
because love is just a game that i can never win

[This message has been edited by Auguste (07-10-2002 01:07 AM).]

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

1 posted 2002-07-03 04:30 AM

hey nice write thanks for sharin. you're very talented!

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sillywilly
Junior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 33
oklahoma

2 posted 2002-07-09 12:54 PM

Yeah, i went through the same thing. You did a good job putting the experience into to words. Tell your friend that she should never regret what she takes from life. You just have to accept your mistakes, learn from them and live on.

MidnightSon
Member

since 2002-05-15

Posts 312
between the gutter & the stars

3 posted 2002-07-09 04:31 PM

you've channeled a lot of feeling into this. the rhythm is a little unsteady at times, but enjoyed it nevertheless.

bein used ain't a picnic. but i agree with silly willy's advice.

it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown

curlygurly
Member

since 2000-09-12

Posts 276
USA

4 posted 2002-07-09 06:41 PM

This was sooooooo good! the same thing almost happened to me, but i was lucky that the relationship ended before i did something stupid. let your friend know that just because she was hurt once, others won't do the same

"Don't be ashamed to cry, let me see you through, cuz i've seen the dark side too" The Pretenders

SavingGrace
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since 2002-05-31

Posts 26
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5 posted 2002-07-10 08:31 PM

i can totally relate to this poem. im sure many of us can. great write. i cant wait to see more. welcome to piptalk

~*Grace*~
You wouldn't be so concerned with what people thought of you if you only knew how seldom they did...

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