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Who iis she
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since 2002-05-14
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Some where over the rainbow

0 posted 2002-07-02 11:00 PM


I want to get out of here
To a place i have never been
I want to see the world
and Experience everything.

I want to talk to fairy tale kings
and be swept away on dragons wings
I want to run with wild horses
And find new courses
Just around the river bend.

Yet I lack the courage to take a stand
To just run away
and find a new land
They need me here
and that i fear
Is what's making me stay.

I want to Bolt
My heart Revolts
I need to runaway
from this place where i stay.
I need to run free
And just be me.

I soffocate in this place
I need room to breathe
And freedom to leave
This town
sucks me down
Into the Depths
Of boring society.

You cant tell this life
Is merely for strife
I have so much to give
And a strong will to live
I need to be free
And just be me

Adventure calls
Upons the wind
If i do not go
I will never know
What it means
To truly live
So i leave now
to a brand new place
Where my life truly begins.

I'm Going now
To talk with fairytale kings
About new things
To be Swept away on dragons wings
Where the very air sings a song of life
To run free with wild horses
And plot new courses
Just around the river bend.

I have gone away
The final Step
I leave this place
with no regrets.

If history has taught us one true thing is that no Species can last forever...

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Demonic Illusion
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since 2002-02-07
Posts 50

1 posted 2002-07-03 12:45 PM


nicely written

Madness is the gift that has been given to me....Mercyless Fate

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Sparks, NV
2 posted 2002-07-03 04:36 AM


hey nice write thanks for sharin.

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Who iis she
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since 2002-05-14
Posts 41
Some where over the rainbow
3 posted 2002-07-03 01:13 PM


Awww thanks both of you.

If history has taught us one true thing is that no Species can last forever...

CwboyAtHeart
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since 2001-04-14
Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA
4 posted 2002-07-03 09:29 PM


I really liked this!  I know how you feel...  I live in a small town that people seem to come and never leave...  lol  Anyway, this was nice, I enjoyed it.

      - Cody -

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If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  

Who iis she
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since 2002-05-14
Posts 41
Some where over the rainbow
5 posted 2002-07-04 02:05 PM


Thats why i wrote this poem i hate my town so much. I really really d and wnat to runaway

If history has taught us one true thing is that no Species can last forever...

SavingGrace
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since 2002-05-31
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6 posted 2002-07-05 11:13 PM


this was very nicely written. but please, please, please, please, don't run away if you are under 18. been there done that, and trust me, that is not a road you want to go down. it seems so simple to just get out and go, but you will come back, they always do. you get scared and say enough, im ready to go back. and all h*ll breaks loose. so do not run away. besides that, you never really get away from anything, it follows you and you will keep running into the same things so just suck it up. i love the poem though, cant wait to see more!

~*Grace*~
You wouldn't be so concerned with what people thought of you if you only knew how seldom they did...

Who iis she
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since 2002-05-14
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Some where over the rainbow
7 posted 2002-07-06 06:15 PM


I am 14 and i have run away 5 times and counting.

If history has taught us one true thing is that no Species can last forever...

Child of the Stars
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Ann Arbor, MI
8 posted 2002-07-07 08:49 PM


And you still haven't figured out that it doesn't work until you're 18 or dead?

You rhymed life with strife...sorry...I have to be honest, your critique message says so. That rhyme was the last part I actually read. I skimmed the rest. Chunks of this poem sound forced and, well..too far from unique to allow me to like much of it. Ok...any of it. Sorry again...

  ~Carly

"Feelings are not supposed to be logical. Dangerous is the man who has rationalized his emotions."
  ~David Borenstein

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