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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA 
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Hello. I just wrote this one tonight... It touches on a few subjects that I haven't really even tried to address with my poems. Anyway, let me know what you think. I hope to make it into a song, if I can come up with a tune. THE GOOD GIRL Sarah Jones was her mother's girl Always following the rules Until the day that changed her world When the quarterback asked her out Kevin Brown lived to rebel Didn't like to follow the rules He did his best to raise some hell And he wanted to change the good girl The smile on her face said she loved him The bruise on her arm didn't talk The grin on his face was grim The beer on his breath said he didn't care At first she thought nothing of it One beer here and there didn't matter But her depression grew with every hit And nobody was sure what was wrong Things worsened with the time The abuse got worse but she didn't talk With every party, every drink, every crime Sarah just didn't know what to do The smile on her face said she loved him The bruise on her arm didn't talk The grin on his face was grim The beer on his breath said he didn't care She kept to herself, constantly asking why Her knife was nestled deep in her pocket She was ready to do it, ready to die On the night that Kevin finally took her life The smile on her face said she loved him The bruise on her arm didn't talk The grin on his face was grim The beer on his breath said he didn't care - Cody - |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
this got me speechless I just hope that it isn't a true story Just tell us it isn't so 2 feelings from me arise from this poem one is of anger and one is sadness excellent write Cody, thanks for sharing again Watup anyways??????  là où est mon amour? |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
The characters are made up... But I'm sure that true stories such as this really do happen, unfortunately. As for me, not too much. It's been kinda confusing around here, my brother has been in the hospital because of his appendix bursting... But I've just been kinda in the background around here lately, not really replying or anything, just reading. - Cody - |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Dude, this was really well done. It really hit me. Good to know this wasn't a story too close to heart, but still a bit eary. Nicely done Cody.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Cody- This is VERY powerfully written, my friend. "The smile on her face said she loved him The bruise on her arm didn't talk" Those two lines say it all. Excellent write! ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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munchkins New Member
since 2002-07-04
Posts 5 |
well i would like to say well done!! that was great sadly though it reminds me too much of how i was a few years back and i think its not untl u see somebody else explain the situation u realise how bad it could have been!ur a veryy talented guy keep it up!wish i had ur passion for poetry!(sorry one of them days ive cut the bad jokes) |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Very powerful, something that I'm sure does happen more frequently than we would like. Good work.  ~sky You look inside my wild mind |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
"The smile on her face said she loved him The bruise on her arm didn't talk" I really like those lines also....very powerful Great write! |
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