Sit in a world of my confusions

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LCBS
Senior Member

since 2001-11-29

Posts 532
Connecticut

0 posted 2002-07-01 12:49 PM

Sit in a world of my confusions
Looking for a path to take
Sort out truth from my delusions
Searching for a life to fake
My faith tells me I’m a sinner
My school writes that I don’t try
My mirror says I could be thinner
My journal quotes "I want to die"
Sit in a world of my confusions
Looking for a soul to mend
Don’t get lost in my illusions
Just my minds game of pretend
My faith says to find redemption
My school insists I have potential
My mirror gives me some exemption
My journal now reads "confidential"
Sit in a world of my confusions
Follow life through twists and turns
A life molded to forgone conclusions
but covered by my hearts concerns
My faith screams to follow God
My school yells follow facts
My mirror reflects a new facade
My journal shows my life’s cracks
Sit in a world of my confusions
Looking for a path to take
Sort out truth from my delusions
Searching for a life to fake

sillywilly
Junior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 33
oklahoma

1 posted 2002-07-01 02:57 PM

I really enjoyed your poem. I liked how you relate school, faith, mirror, and journal to what you are feeling. Everything that you said is true for a lot of people. I can totally relate.

SavingGrace
Junior Member

since 2002-05-31

Posts 26
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2 posted 2002-07-01 10:14 PM

oh my gosh i love this poem. i think this one will really hit home with a lot of people. great topic to get people to relate. we all have times where we just feel like this. but hey, it's called growing pains lol, which is why we are in a teen poetry forum. great write. this is definately going to my library!!

~*Grace*~
You wouldn't be so concerned with what people thought of you if you only knew how seldom they did...

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

3 posted 2002-07-02 12:00 PM

Wow. I loved this. Awesome way to show all of the contradictions we have to live with in every day life... Everybody/everything tells us something different, and we have to figure out what to believe and what to live with. So in a way, we're all living fake lifes because if you live a life of faith, the world and school sees you as a fake because you don' follow the "facts" of life... This really makes me think... I love it! Great write.

      - Cody -

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LisaLongLegs
New Member

since 2002-07-02

Posts 8

4 posted 2002-07-02 02:26 PM

I like it! It's got a good rhythm. Well done!

Cinderelly
Member

since 2001-12-31

Posts 189
NM, USA

5 posted 2002-07-03 03:18 AM

This is a really well written poem . . . Great job!

Life is a moderately good play w/ a badly written thrid act. - Unknown

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

6 posted 2002-07-03 04:52 AM

yay my lisa is gettin good at this hehe you go girly! nice write thanks for sharin!

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Skyfire

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since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

7 posted 2002-07-03 08:43 PM

Lisa, lisa, lisa. How I did enjoy this one. Quite an insight into your mind I got. (sorry, the Yoda thing came out again) Methinks I'll start reading your work again.

KellieBellie
New Member

since 2002-07-04

Posts 1

8 posted 2002-07-04 08:16 AM

I liked your poem!
Though im not going to say why or whatever. But i would like to know how your going now? I dont know when this poem was written but i like to help people and listen to there problems and obviously your a smart girl so you wouldnt have a problem with that! So get back to me if you can. Congratulations.

Match
Member

since 2002-07-01

Posts 286
Canada Edmonton

9 posted 2002-07-04 03:06 PM

awsome poem , I totally related to it

Do I dare to look at whats really there,
Will I be burned?
I cant see past all the pain and torture that goes on in the places we call,
home.
~Azi

munchkins
New Member

since 2002-07-04

Posts 5

10 posted 2002-07-04 04:44 PM

wow i think ur poem is fab.........well done

blakloks
Member

since 2002-06-01

Posts 60

11 posted 2002-07-07 12:30 PM

wow this is really good, lots of people can relate to this and its also well-written, with rhyme and all.

...really true abt life, everythings all fake, you have to probe really hard to find out what someone and is really like and sometimes they arent what u thought they were ,like ur frens, and its so depressing and hurting.

Missthang
Member

since 2001-07-03

Posts 103

12 posted 2002-07-07 03:08 PM

this was great!!! i love how you went through and explained the thoughts of your faith, school, and then how you seen yourslef in your diary. i really loved it. it told a story and i love the repetition. the rhyme scheme you chose was great! awesome post.

"Whatever you are doing, love yourslef for doing it.
Whatever you are feeling, love yourself for feeling it."
-Thaddeus Golas

[This message has been edited by Missthang (07-07-2002 03:09 PM).]

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