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A Random Thought (life)
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A Random Thought (life) |
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deadeyes Junior Member
since 2001-11-07
Posts 33 |
Rams of children are jumping from the ceiling masquarade balls with inhumane and pure faces sickening patriotic citizens the cries of a fallen Christianity. Lemmings with dirty faces stop following the gifted flickering entrails of light and sound rats purchase houses while the tick-tock sings 4 pm and no traffic at sight. The people savior the taste of concrete the worms crawl out of their punchholes the walls stare at the disturbing eyes while there's a boxing match manipulating ravish beasts. Metal shines in the popcorn paintings the mayhem of celery on the grass fields lovers and haters share their motivations while a translucent purple world screams for forgiveness. AND HOPE. "Silencio..no hay banda..no hay orquesta." |
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sillywilly Junior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 33oklahoma |
Your poem is many random thoughts but I like it. Its free and that is the way poetry should be. I hope to read more of your work. |
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fulanodetal3684 Junior Member
since 2001-10-10
Posts 19 |
Wow! This one came right out of nowhere, I must say I think it is your most wildest work to date!!! Very good, though, I'm gonna probably be here some time trying to get under it and figure out how the pieces fit together... very interesting, this could be better than I think, I'm just reacting, this is my first impression. |
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Deep_Inside Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 377i can't stop hiding |
it was scatered and hard to get fully. but i liked it thanks for the read |
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punkrockerrobin 
since 2001-05-15
Posts 1180Sparks, NV |
hey nice write thanks for sharin. |
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