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fozzyozzy
Member

since 2001-03-15

Posts 336
Lessburg Virginia

0 posted 2001-07-14 02:59 AM

This may be my most depressing thing i've written in a while(in my opinion), yet i still feel uninterested, sorta desensitized and disenchanted(writer's block i guess). Methinks that i need a break for a while. See ya later

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I Lost It

Wind back time
Rewind the clock
To a time I could not stop
A simple rhyme from enchanting me
So freely pen flowed
Beyond paper constraints
Adding two here rhymes without restraints
Wind back time
Before there were two
A showme and a shunme
Hearts and doves Snakes and sweat
What human being can be found through me
I have cryed not for long with need be
All i have left is a show (charading i care)
I see myselft from the stairwell
The sirens shaking me
Stupid siren leave me alone
And then i am he(me) (who's fooling who)
At 3a.m. comes a self portrait i am not proud of
I fear
I fear
It was not time that mattered or changed
Whatever i've lost
i never had.
So freely pen flowed

"and Death i think is no paranthesis"-e.e. cummings

branden726

Senior Member

since 2000-09-25

Posts 607
Bay City, MI

1 posted 2001-07-14 10:21 AM

This poem was great all though not a happy one you still got that magic touch

All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare!
~*~Branden~*~

Spice
Senior Member

since 2001-04-13

Posts 1266
Resting in my cardboard box.

2 posted 2001-07-14 10:50 PM

Not my favorite of yours Sean... Still a nice write.
Thanks for the read.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2001-07-15 05:12 AM

AMAZING! I so admire your writing skills. I wish I could write like that! You write with such emotions, such passions......I don't know what you write with cuz if I knew, I'd try it myself!
I REALLY loved this one, TOTALLY!
One of my favs!
Your absense from the forums will sadden me, but if you come back refreshed and with beautiful pieces such as this, then by all means take a vacation

I await your return with open arms, and a reading eye.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-07-27 09:17 AM

I could tell with your words and the way you pu thtme together that you have so much talent in you. The poem is still not perfect but keep writing and one day it will. Great job. I'm very impressed

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JBaker515

Member

since 2001-02-28

Posts 458
Dartmouth College

5 posted 2001-07-27 11:55 AM

This is very impressive, you did wonderful.

Nothing to be ashamed of, its great.
So much for writers block!

~Jeff~

"Within you I lose myself
Without you I find myself
Wanting to be lost again."

Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

6 posted 2001-07-27 02:23 PM

Your a very impressive writer. I thought this was amazing. Hope to see you back soon,

Regina

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

7 posted 2001-08-01 01:33 PM

This is an awesome display of your talent! Definitely one of my favs in the forum.. this one's going into my library where it rightfully belongs... I hope you come back soon from you break. Everyone needs a vacation sometimes.. come back soon

Again, thanks for sharing this awesome piece of work with us.

--Marie

You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning.

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