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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2002-06-29 11:13 AM

I don't think,
words can express,
what you meant to me,
but I'll give it a try.

Filled With so much happiness,
when you're around,
I loos my small grip,
on reality and fall,
into my sweet dream world.
With your arms around me,
I've never felt safer.
I'm sorry for not telling,
you sooner, but,
better late than never.
So I thought I'd tell you now.
What is it? you ask.
Pure and simple,
I love you.
No matter what happens,
a part of me,
will always love you.
I care about you so much,
the amount is impossible to measure.
If you would give our relationship,
just one more chance,
I promise to treat you better,
love you more,
and to show my feelings more.
I Love you.

~i kept the right ones out and let the wrong ones in~ Aerosmith~

Tomer
Senior Member

since 2002-06-28

Posts 1168
Michigan

1 posted 2002-06-29 12:24 PM

Bravo...a very strong piece obviously about someone you care about. I can relate to that and I applaude you for a well done piece. Keep up the good work!

Tomer

Dark Enchantress
Senior Member

since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
meet Morgana

2 posted 2002-06-30 11:17 AM

As long as you try that's all that matters. But personally, I think you succeeded.

I normally hate poems like this, but this sounded very sincere and very true to your heart and soul so I like it. Thanks for posting.

[Jaime]

"I think I would like to call myself 'the girl who wanted to be God'." Sylvia Plath

Punk Angel
Member

since 2001-07-25

Posts 66
Pennsylvania, US

3 posted 2002-07-01 08:44 PM

Hey stac, this is a really good poem. i guess its always easier to tell ppl wut u think in poems then it is in real life eh? well nehow, c ya l8er~luv kris

Baby_Angel123
Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 63
Unity, ME

4 posted 2002-07-02 03:25 PM

Really good poem. You expressed your emotions very well. Keep up the good work.
~Heather

Deep_Inside
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

5 posted 2002-07-02 06:10 PM

you really tried to get tons of emption out is this poem. thanks for the read

when you live you die
when you die your forgotten
when your forgotten you truly die

[This message has been edited by Deep_Inside (07-02-2002 06:11 PM).]

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