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Teen Poetry #5

Peaceful Easy Feeling

Demonic Illusion
Member

since 2002-02-07

Posts 50

0 posted 2002-06-27 06:06 PM

As the water streams down river,
My thoughts run wild and shiver.
With all the things revealing,
This peaceful easy feeling.
Gazing out of my window into the sky,
Sneak outside and to the stars I fly.
Glance up and look at the ceiling,
This peaceful easy feeling.
Ocean waves crash into the sand,
Walk down the beach shells in hand.
As the dolphins frolick voices squeeling,
Can't deny this peaceful easy feeling.

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

1 posted 2002-06-28 08:41 PM

Demonic Illusion-

You created a soft, tangible tone here, which added more depth to this poem.
Reading it was quite peaceful, and the imagery you created was lovely. ^_^
No critiques here.
Well done!

Leah

Demonic Illusion
Member

since 2002-02-07

Posts 50

2 posted 2002-06-29 11:27 AM

thank you, i was told i always write dark stuff and i should "try" writing a happy one so i wrote a happy one =o) but im glad you liked it

Madness is the gift that has been given to me....Mercyless Fate

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