Teen Poetry #5 |
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What Do You Want? |
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BrokenAngel Member
since 2002-01-06
Posts 141Puryear, TN, USA ![]() |
I know I've been gone for a long time, I'm sorry, but I guess you can consider this my re entry to piptalk so long as I'm still welcome that is. ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ What do you want from me? What have I done to you? Why do you treat me like this? I thought you loved me You said you did But you starved me You neglected me I thought you cared for me You told me that you did But you didn't beleave me when I needed you You ignored my pain You told me I was your baby girl But I was only for you to get money Only for you to get attention Only for you to get benifits When I asked for something I needed I had to fight tooth and nail to get Almost like I didn't deserve it You were the one who deserved everything "I had you" But you didn't want me "I clothed you" I went around in clothes that were dirty and torn Then when I leave You try to get me back Then you care about me Then I'm your "baby girl" But now I'm not again Now you don't want me Now you don't know me You said for me not to come back What do you want? What am I supposed to be? I can only be myself Why can't you understand that? I am your baby girl This is what I have become This is what you turned me into Mother ~*~*~Night Angel~*~*~ [This message has been edited by BrokenAngel (06-19-2002 04:19 PM).] |
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ShortSexyAngelOnEarth Junior Member
since 2001-12-24
Posts 36im a louisiana cajun princess! lol |
wow........ i know thats not the best constructive crit. but thats all i can say..... wow. really hit home for me. keep ur chin up girlie, email me if u wanna talk. as u can see from my sig. my names Maryn, and my email, is [email protected] Maryn |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You will always be welcome here in Passions I see you expressed a lot of feelings into this I just hope things are good for you Don't bother yourself with too many questions It'll just drive you nuts Thanks for sharing là où est mon amour? |
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Neosaphire Junior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 20Oklahoma City |
It's interesting when you come across a piece of poetry that reads so well as prose too. I like. ![]() |
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Neosaphire Junior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 20Oklahoma City |
Ooo, actually, thought on what I previously posted...I could totally see this performed as a monologue. You capture the train of conciousness so well! Anyways, that's my bit, great poem ![]() |
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cutiepiesugarbabie Member
since 2002-06-07
Posts 110A Cloud In the Sky |
really stong poem it takes a strong person to look back at someone who did them wrong-keep on livin! ![]() o*~Everyone makes mistakes-get over them and make more tomorrow!~*o |
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cutiepiesugarbabie Member
since 2002-06-07
Posts 110A Cloud In the Sky |
really stong poem it takes a strong person to look back at someone who did them wrong-keep on livin! ![]() o*~Everyone makes mistakes-get over them and make more tomorrow!~*o |
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