Teen Poetry #5 |
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A child |
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Jenn Cirrincione![]() ![]()
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl ![]() |
Deep within my eyes, a sigh- a frightened little soul. And tears do tread as lips they lie- while telling you to go. And this small child, alive in my- weakened, crumpled, frame; Speaks it true when she does try- for your heart to aim. Way back, I posted this in some other forum, but I think statute of double posts limitations is up ![]() Constructive comments welcome. Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving? |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I actually really, really liked this.. which is rare. I'm not picky. I've just got thick skin. It's not necessarily a creative subject (inner child) but it's used in a way that's creative (at least in my interpretation). Which is another thing.. it's rather clear on how you're feeling and thinking yet the poem itself is open to different interpretations, ideas, and feelings. Yay. ![]() [Jaime] |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
this is amazing i'm totally speechlaess right now *standing ovation* là où est mon amour? |
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songsoftheaftermath Member
since 2002-06-19
Posts 84a world of disarray |
hehehe...sorry but i wasnt totally blown away by this...but it did bring a sad smile to my face..cuz it is kinda sad. seeing yourself as a child but wary isnt all too nice. all things said and done though, it was an enjoyable read. thanks for sharing jenn... by the looks of it- yer STILL a child! ![]() ![]() could the darkness be my friend? |
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Tomer Senior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 1168Michigan |
I was very much impressed by this piece....I think we can all relate a little bit to what you said. |
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