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Tidal Wave |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
This was a mistake, everything was fake. Nothing to gain, except more pain. So lost and confused, heart still bruised. Nothing to do or say, wanting to walk away. No one there for me, I want to flee. You're dragging me down, I think I'm gonna drown. It's here, my worst fear. A tidal wave, trying to be brave..... ~¿Our lives are soap operas, no wonder so many people sit glued 2 the tv watching them.....¿~ |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I've never been one to rhyme much, but in some cases- it just fits. I like what you've done here, nice job.  Jenn Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving? |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
"It's here, my worst fear. A tidal wave, trying to be brave....." Sums it all up right there I suppose. I really liked it. For the most part the rhyming was smooth and it didn't seem forced. Keep writing. Maybe it'll help.. or maybe it won't. Good luck. [Jaime] |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
thank u 4 the replies, dunno wut else 2 say!  ~U will always remember the people that touch ur heart, but u will never 4get those who break it~ |
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