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Here by my side
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Here by my side |
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Hill's_Chatabox Junior Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 46USA |
Here By my Side Here I lay alone No one here by my side The night comes and goes The day forever slow When was it last, that you were here by my side? In my dreams it was just last night Once I wake up, I realize that I have to wait the day away, waiting till I fall asleep. This is when I feel you here by myside. Once agian I awoke, and feel no one here by my side. When will my dream become a reality? Whenever I figure out who it is here by side. Here through out my dreams, and through out the night. Shoot for the moon cause if you miss you'll still end up in the *stars*!!! |
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Hill's_Chatabox Junior Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 46USA |
I don't really know if anyone will like this one, and if no one does that is fine I just had it in my little poem book so I thought I might as well post it. just wanted to let those who read it know.. Shoot for the moon cause if you miss you'll still end up in the *stars*!!! |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
I see what you're saying in the poem- I liked the idea. Thanks for the read, Hillary.  I enjoyed it. |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
i feel this one...i can realte im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Angelwings Member
since 1999-08-27
Posts 222IL, USA |
I very much like this one! Thanx for sharing *that what does not kill us makes us stronger!* |
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branden726
since 2000-09-25
Posts 607Bay City, MI |
The cry of lost love and plenty of pain we all fear will happen to us one day this poem expresses your feelings so bright i really enjoyed this one plz continue to write. All you other poets beware my true feelings and poetry are about to flare! |
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pure_innocence Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 80Colorado, US |
I'm tired of dreaming a lie. I can't tell how often I look forward to the night, to sleep. Only because it offers an escape to my world where's it's all my way. But then I wake up to reality, to life, the never-ending struggle. Still I smile, because it is these very dreams that give me reason to live to get up. My aspirations are what I strive for... Beautiful poem, I can relate. . . Lord knows I can relate. |
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CwboyAtHeart Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541Selah, WA, USA |
I liked this. Your emotion is definitely seen in your poems. Very good. - Cody - |
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Hill's_Chatabox Junior Member
since 2001-07-10
Posts 46USA |
Thankyou for the awesome reply's, I had no idea that anyone would even like this one. But I am glad that you have all proved me wrong. thanxs again. ~Hillary~ Shoot for the moon cause if you miss you'll still end up in the *stars*!!! |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought this was ok. Not your best, but the message overall was well received.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
This was very sweet! Well written poem. I enjoyed it, and look forward to seeing more soon, I hope --Marie You think yourself a failure, but perhaps the biggest loss is winning... |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Hillary, I personally didn't like the way it was written. it started off neat but then it just went all over the place. However, you expressed yourself well and I thought your ending was really good. Thanks for sharing this. ~AF~ Tearless grief bleeds inwardly. |
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