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Dear Santa,@ 1 time
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Dear Santa,@ 1 time |
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inspiredpoetwriter Member
since 2002-01-05
Posts 104Minnesota |
1) Title: Dear Santa Dear Santa- This year I wont need Gifts from you only One single wish. Dear Santa- This year I wont need A doll from you only One single wish. Dear Santa- This year I wont need a chocolate Candy canes or hershey kisses Only one single wish. Dear Santa- This year I wont need Perfume or jewelry only One single wish. Dear Santa- This year I wont need Kisses or mistletoe. Dear Santa- This year I wont need A pray or a sing along song Only one single wish. Dear Santa- This year I wont need A puppy for box full of toys Only one single wish. Dear Santa- This year I wont need Candles or my front tooth Only one single wish. Dear Santa- This year I wont need Stiffed animals ,dreams of any Kind time to just stop Only one single wish. Dear Santa- This year I wont need Frosty or the ginger bread man Only one single wish. Dear Santa- This year please Give me the gift of Love that’s my one Single wish. 2) Title: @ 1 time At one time I thought I found Nr. Right again I was wrong it Turned out to be bull & fights. I guess I thought you were Loving & sweet than I turned Around to find you’d beat me & leave me To starve. One momentyou loved me Cared for me told me your feelings Flat out straightthenext you’d leave a Bruisemake me bleed tell me you lied You always hated me. At one time I thought We’d always be together get Married have kids than the sky Changed to dark & mean. I guess I thought my tears Would never fall was I wrong Today & always I ask god What the hell happen to the boy I use To once Love? One moment I was Alive the next I was Dead all because I never listened To what my heart had said. ¥¤¥¤¥¥¤¥¤¥iM a PoEt WhO wRiTeZ Wit HeR Heart ¥¤¥¤¥¥¤¥¤¥ [This message has been edited by Dopey_Dope (06-06-2002 12:26 AM).] |
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haydenjames Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 164Antigua & Barbuda |
Both poems are beautiful. I really love the ending of the first one. Good writes.. My poetry is at: http://www.thehayden.org |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well written poem. The first one was a bit predictable, but I still liked it. The second was nice as well, but it contained a few words that were evil  So I edited it. Anyhow, nice job. Looking forward to more.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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blakloks Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 60 |
i liked the first one...it was sweet, you noe little kids always pine for something and then when santa doesnt give them that they get so sad...i almost always got what i wanted  anywae, he second one was kind of sad... ~hugs~ its great that you write your heart out. i do , too, and i feel much better after that, and pple in the forums can sympatyhise with me and that makes me feel much better without having to show pple i noe my deepest feelings |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Great job with both poems! I like the first one, coz you managed to build up a certain level of suspense. I had to stop myself from scrolling down the list to see what your wish is!  _,,,^.^,,,_ |
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