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inspiredpoetwriter
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since 2002-01-05
Posts 104
Minnesota

0 posted 2002-06-03 09:51 PM


1)

Title: Dear Santa

Dear Santa-
This year I wont need
Gifts from you only
One single wish.

Dear Santa-
This year I wont need
A doll from you only
One single wish.

Dear Santa-
This year I wont need a chocolate
Candy canes or hershey kisses
Only one single wish.

Dear Santa-
This year I wont need
Perfume or jewelry only
One single wish.

Dear Santa-
This year I wont need
Kisses or mistletoe.

Dear Santa-
This year I wont need
A pray or a sing along song
Only one single wish.

Dear Santa-
This year I wont need
A puppy for box full of toys
Only one single wish.

Dear Santa-
This year I wont need
Candles or my front tooth
Only one single wish.

Dear Santa-
This year I wont need
Stiffed animals ,dreams of any
Kind time to just stop
Only one single wish.

Dear Santa-
This year I wont need
Frosty or the ginger bread man
Only one single wish.

Dear Santa-
This year please
Give me the gift of
Love that’s my one
Single wish.


2)


Title: @ 1 time


At one time I thought I found
Nr. Right again I was wrong it
Turned out to be bull & fights.

I guess I thought you were
Loving & sweet than I turned
Around to find you’d beat me & leave me
To starve.

One momentyou loved me
Cared for me told me your feelings
Flat out straightthenext you’d leave a
Bruisemake me bleed tell me you lied
You always hated me.

At one time I thought
We’d always be together get
Married have kids than the sky
Changed to dark & mean.

I guess I thought my tears
Would never fall was I wrong
Today & always I ask god
What the hell happen to the boy I use
To once Love?

One moment I was
Alive the next I was
Dead all because I never listened
To what my heart had said.


¥¤¥¤¥¥¤¥¤¥iM a PoEt WhO wRiTeZ Wit HeR Heart ¥¤¥¤¥¥¤¥¤¥

[This message has been edited by Dopey_Dope (06-06-2002 12:26 AM).]

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haydenjames
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since 2002-02-14
Posts 164
Antigua & Barbuda
1 posted 2002-06-04 09:16 PM


Both poems are beautiful. I really love the ending of the first one. Good writes..

My poetry is at:  http://www.thehayden.org

Dopey Dope
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San Juan, Puerto Rico
2 posted 2002-06-06 12:28 PM


Very well written poem. The first one was a bit predictable, but I still liked it. The second was nice as well, but it contained a few words that were evil So I edited it.
Anyhow, nice job. Looking forward to more.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

blakloks
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since 2002-06-01
Posts 60

3 posted 2002-06-06 10:34 AM


i liked the first one...it was sweet, you noe little kids always pine for something and then when santa doesnt give them that they get so sad...i almost always got what i wanted anywae, he second one was kind of sad... ~hugs~
its great that you write your heart out. i do , too, and  i feel much better after that, and pple in the forums can sympatyhise with me and that makes me feel much better without having to show pple i noe my deepest feelings

Mon Cherie
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4 posted 2002-06-06 11:25 AM


Great job with both poems!
I like the first one, coz you managed to build up a certain level of suspense. I had to stop myself from scrolling down the list to see what your wish is!

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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