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Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

0 posted 2002-06-01 11:14 AM

Just to hold you,
is a blessing.
To kiss you,
is what I'm missing.
But love baby,
that's for real.
So let me tell you,
here's the deal.
Just love me,
love me so tender.
You do that,
I'll love you forever.
Don't hurt me,
like those before you.
Don't lie to me,
as they did too.
Just hold me close,
for you're in my dreams.
But reality is better,
that's how it seems.
I don't want to fall asleep.
I want to look into your eyes,
that look so deep.
So much pain,
that lies behind those baby blues.
Show me the real person,
I've grown to love, the real you.

~¿Our lives are soap operas, no wonder so many people sit glued 2 the tv watching them.....¿~

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

1 posted 2002-06-01 04:11 PM

I really liked this. It was well written and flowed very nicely. Thanks for sharing!!!

Sometimes I get so weird
I even freak myself out
I laugh myself to sleep
It's my lullaby

aVriL lAvIgNe

Punk Angel
Member

since 2001-07-25

Posts 66
Pennsylvania, US

2 posted 2002-06-05 09:04 PM

wow this one is great too!! n dont call me slow!! lol well whenever u get more TELL me so i can reply to them cuz i really like them! lylas ~kris

We love what is lost, but does what we lost love us back??
~*Krista*~

Dopey Dope

Moderator

Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

3 posted 2002-06-06 03:39 AM

Very well done! VERY VERY well done. I really liked the ryhme scheme in this one. It flowed very nicely. A poem that hit me hard....keep it up.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

Somewhere out there a cow is laughing at you

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

4 posted 2002-06-07 03:17 PM

Yep, Stac, I can see the growth of words.
Good goin girl, you make me proud. *s*

Like a red brick,
in a white wall
somebodies brush
forgot to paint...
lonely....(as sung by Tracy Lawrence..)

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