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I hate those fries
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I hate those fries |
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Ree Ree Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 56providence, RI |
** this is also a song, so it sounds kinda weird too Hey beautiful i don't understand what your saying Hey beautiful i don't understand why your staying I still love you wish you did too you just can't find the words again Hey beautiful i don't understand why your waiting Hey beautiful i don't understand why we're dating you found someone new i know it's true just waitin for the facts to come through I haven't sat and watched the snow fall in quite a long time It doesn't really matter cause you never meant a thing by your loving words composed of lies i was naive to your blue eyes explain to me why i failed to see the pain, the hurt, caused by your lies Hey beautiful i don't understand why it's hurting Hey beautiful i don't understand why i'm not learning I trusted you My hearts in two do do do do da da dat do explain to me why i failed to see the pain, the hurt caused by your lies your lies, your lieing lieing eyes Hey beautiful i told you i'd love you for always Hey beautiful i guess that's not good enough these days So i won't say beautiful won't look your way beautiful no matter, everythings ok beautiful... |
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knightlyshadows Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 791obscured vision |
really liked this line: "It doesn't really matter cause you never meant a thing by your loving words composed of lies" As well as the last stanza/chorus line. nice Job. ~tiff “A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.” I know Im not perfect but I can smile & I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes [This message has been edited by knightlyshadows (05-21-2002 03:51 PM).] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I enjoyed. Is the title in reference to one of those McDonald's or BK break-ups? Sheesh, that's not very kind.  She said burn ... together. |
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Ree Ree Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 56providence, RI |
lol... no it has nothing to do with mcdonalds or n e thing like that. All the names are personal jokes. The kid it's about wrote "how do u like them fries" somewhere so my friends told me to name it " i hate those fries" we name all out songs and poems wierd personal joke things like that. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Well, it's a good tactic. It sure got me reading. She said burn ... together. |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I like this. Quite interesting. I could definitly feel it lyrically. Nice. Jenn Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving? |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Ree Ree, I haven't sat and watched the snow fall in quite a long time It doesn't really matter cause you never meant a thing by your loving words composed of lies just curious here..what has watching the snow got to do with your friend's insincere words? i was naive to your blue eyes this gave me a chuckle..i thought this was very concise... |
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Ree Ree Member
since 2001-06-28
Posts 56providence, RI |
lol..yeah. Alot of things i write are hard to follow if your not in my head, i guess that's a bad thing. But i broke up with the kid this is about and it was like the first snow fall of the year and he called me and was something like" how could u do this when it's snowing. SNow's suppose to be so happy and i can't be happy right now" something like that. Sorry if that's not exactly what was said but n e ways...it's just saying that that was a while ago, even though it's still in my mind. |
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