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babycakes304
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0 posted 2002-05-18 11:12 AM


Walking in the Wilderness


Walking in the wilderness is peaceful and
relaxing.
Birds chirping in several directions is
music to my ears.
The crackling sound of my feet on the sticks
and leaves echoes through the thick trees.
Flowers are scattered in spots all around me.
I can feel the rough tree bark on my fingers as i glide past them.
The smell of a fresh rain fall lingers in the air.
I close my eyes and breath in the smell.
Walking more i can see some ripe berries,
freshly grown.
I grab one and put it up to my mouth to take
a taste.
There was an overwhelming burst of flavor in
my mouth.
When I got to turn back i take one last...
smell of the rain,hear of the birds, sight
of the flowers, taste of the berries.

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Jenn Cirrincione
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1 posted 2002-05-18 11:19 AM


Wonderful use of imagery.
Great first post, I look forward to more.

Welcome to PIP, if you have any questions, feel free to email me, or any moderator.

Jenn

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Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

Who iis she
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2 posted 2002-05-18 12:06 PM


Heyy i am new too. The poem is great not something i would exactly write but keep it up.

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Who iis she
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Some where over the rainbow
3 posted 2002-05-18 12:07 PM


Heyy i am new too. The poem is great not something i would exactly write but keep it up.

Τ׺·. .·º ËriÇ康. .·º×¤Î
"Its your body use it because someday your going to lose it"-Jeff hardy

babycakes304
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4 posted 2002-05-18 03:32 PM


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IKNAP
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5 posted 2002-05-19 02:24 AM


great first post, moving and creative! looking forward to much more
Spirit Of Twilight
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6 posted 2002-05-19 12:12 PM


Babycakes,
This is a lovely piece! Keep writing!
Neha

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7 posted 2002-05-19 01:57 PM


i liked the "overwhelming burst of flavour"..i could almost taste it...

and welcome to passions..

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