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Teen Poetry #5

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Dunphy
Member

since 2002-03-14

Posts 82
Massachusetts USA

0 posted 2002-05-09 01:19 PM

i like it when tha gurls are close ta me
that's tha way iss supposed ta be.
i like it when they show me love
they tell me i'm a gift frum upabove.
thiss happens constantly
awl gurls find away ta get next ta me.
they be tellin me a have a good hawt
then you know they breake it apawt.
why does it happens ta me
thiss iss one thing i cna't believe.
someone has ta explain
before i stawt bust outta my chain.

from dunphy
aka KJ
5-9-02

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

1 posted 2002-05-10 11:00 AM

You know- you have an interesting style. I can tell you have a way of describing your thoughts as no other can.
I do have some trouble reading through the slang though; and possibly if you wrote it a bit more universal it would be easier to read through and understand. hehe
I'm only 19 and I'm already too old for today's "slang". Man I feel old.

Nice expressions of feeling-
Jenn

"I can't get you out of my head- your love is all I think about."

songsoftheaftermath
Member

since 2002-06-19

Posts 84
a world of disarray

2 posted 2002-06-27 01:53 AM

hehe no jenn youre not alone...its really hard to read your work...oh well...it was a challenge all the same.

could the darkness be my friend?

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