Great job on this song!!!! Really enjoyed it Thanks for sharing!

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Wanted to say I enjoyed this song. It's nice to see a song here and there (I myself am a songwriter). So, thanks for that.

The song itself seemed a bit... confused, as I think you were trying to do. It ranged from missing her, giving your all for her, being confused, wanting her, et all. My only caution is perhaps a bit too much change for a 4 minute song. Take Enrique's "Escape." One emotion: You can't escape my love." Feel me?

"Verse 4:
If two words could make you stay
I'd have to say "love you",
I know it's not that simple
but I'm confused and blue."

When you say, "I'd have to say" it kinda makes it seem like you are unsure if you want to say 'love you.' And 'confused and blue' didn't really keep up with the rest of the song. With how well you wrote other parts, I sense you could improve upon that.


I really like verse three and the chorus.

"Tag:
I'd give you everything
if you come back to the nest
And I wll love you so
Untill I've got nothing left..."

I love you so seems like "confused and blue." You can do better mate.

Sincerely,
Titus

The ultimate measure of a man is not where he stands in moments of comfort and convinience, but where he stands at times of challange and controversy.