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0 posted 2002-04-11 02:11 AM


The love for you
possesses my soul.
Baby, you lead my eyes,
my eyes to tears.
All that you are
quenches my thirst,
brightens my soul,
betters my life.
I see you, and my being
trembles to the core.
You possess the ability
to make or break
all that we could be.
Do as you wish,
your desires I crave.
Lay your head on my shoulders,
and rest for a moment.
Love me if you wish,
or walk out of my life.
But know the tears will flow;
[either way]
I think only of you.

4/10/02

© Copyright 2002 Daniel Redding - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-04-11 08:14 AM


oh man, this is really good danniti. i think its the most heartfelt poem ive read of yours. its more personal and therefore the emotions within it seem all the more real. wonderfully penned buddy...whoever this is for should take it to heart. keep writing little one

The feeling of Sleepiness when you're not in bed, and can't get there, is the meanest feeling in the world.-- Edgar Waston Howe


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2 posted 2002-04-11 01:10 PM


Awww, thank you Cherry.

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Titus

"Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter"

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3 posted 2002-04-11 05:47 PM




(sigh) You are a true romantic, sweet friend, I know you will find the woman of your dreams and she will always be blessed by the pure love and sincerity you will offer her! (big hugggsssss) This poem shines with such desire, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Daniel, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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4 posted 2002-04-13 06:17 PM


*hugs* Your style is one that I love... you can take absolutely anything and make it entirely yours and it's always clear in it's presentation. Hmm.. remember what I told you about the paintings (on the phone)? It reminds me of that. Beautiful.

Think about it.

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5 posted 2002-04-13 07:00 PM


Thank you Noah.

Memina...

"you can take absolutely anything and make it entirely yours and it's always clear in it's presentation."

What's interesting in this is while I do take that anything.... I don't take it from being anything and making it entirely mine. It was always mine to begin with. I only write what I can feel and see and know is in me.... that way my poetry is real, and hopefully has some depth. I must say I am glad it's clear in it's presentation.

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Titus

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6 posted 2002-04-13 07:52 PM


I meant that you can take any subject or genre, dork. Of course what you think/feel is yours from the start. It shows in what you write.

Think about it.

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (04-13-2002 07:54 PM).]

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7 posted 2002-04-14 01:48 AM


Did you just call me a DORK, memina?

Now you're gonna get it...

*rubs hands with glee*


~
Mon Verite

Much ado abotu nothing....

Carpe Diem!

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8 posted 2002-04-14 10:59 PM


Sounds like a strong girl!!! Great emotions in the ti liked it muchos!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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9 posted 2002-05-05 09:16 PM


oh wow..simply wow...this perfectly describes what i feel for my bf...awesome write and thank you so much for posting it

A life without loveā€¦is no life at all.

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10 posted 2002-05-06 12:48 PM


All that you are
quenches my thirst,
brightens my soul,
betters my life.

I really love this part.. =)
It is a wonder how someone can touch your life, your whole being... changing you into someone you never knew you could be...

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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