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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2002-04-10 12:04 PM


You penetrated
My unattainable heart
You shouldn't have
Tried to sugar coat
The truth
Before you
Actually had the chance
To get to know me
You didn't know a thing
Of how my heart worked
And yet
You thought you were
Doing the right thing
By trying to protect me
You should have been honest
Should have been more blunt
You should have told me
Not to hold my breath
I think it's quite unfair
That everyone knows you
But you do it so openly
Yet that isn't good
Enough for me
I want to know you
Intimately
Not through broadcasts
Of unspoken frequencies
Why, do you not trust me
What are you afraid of
Why won't you let me get close
Why won't you let me get to know you
Instead of always worrying about me...

[This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (04-10-2002 12:07 PM).]

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Lisa_bebe15
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1 posted 2002-04-10 12:14 PM


Hey, this is really good..I can relate to this poem so much...Its not funny...Good write!
*Lisa Ann*

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knightlyshadows
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2 posted 2002-04-16 01:20 AM


woah this was great. Loved it actually. Especially this lil bit:
I want to know you
Intimately
Not through broadcasts
Of unspoken frequencies

Excellent write. It has alot of meaning and depth to it.
..tiff..

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

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3 posted 2002-04-16 11:47 AM


i wonder....

[This message has been edited by Alyssa (04-16-2002 11:49 AM).]

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4 posted 2002-04-16 02:00 PM


I really enjoyed this kristin! Amazing job on this one

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