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Teen Poetry #5

denial

quietlydying

Senior Member

since 2001-06-10

Posts 935
the wonderful land of oz

0 posted 2002-04-10 12:41 PM

pop.pop.pop.
yet another
into me.

I spread my
ground
while my soul
sucks in,

pretending
it doesn't exist.

/jen/

so foul and fair a day i have not seen. - macbeth act 1, scene 3

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

1 posted 2002-04-10 09:52 AM

Short, very eerie...Wanting your self to disappear is a common thought, but wanting your soul to do so adds that other layer of depth...I've never really seen it expressed like this. I liked the abstract imagery stuff going on in here...Very nice..

~Carly

"Feelings are not supposed to be logical. Dangerous is the man who has rationalized his emotions."
~David Borenstein

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-04-10 11:45 AM

Eerie is definately a good word to use to describe this one. It was short and sweet and very powerful. I enjoyed it lots. Thanks for sharing!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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