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xerxes
Junior Member

since 2001-08-05

Posts 34

0 posted 2002-04-07 04:09 AM

Meet me in your galaxy less than new
Arrived through light-years of no fear in your eyes
Dodging misplaced planets always searching for you
Star clusters of your voice fill moonless skies
Floating endlessly in search of planetary freedom from blackholes of lies.
Collapse of space in my heart
Another horizon lost in constellations farther apart.
Supernova dreamers in a dying space
I’ll still be somewhere undiscovered underneath the outer stars, riding the comet of fate
Floating through entities of time, a search to discover the world without the fake
Orbiting my dreams, something beautiful I made...

-Xerxes

laconic
Member

since 2002-02-17

Posts 64
Melbourne, Australia

1 posted 2002-04-07 04:25 AM

this was very well written not to mention good to read.
metaphors..wow. nice write keep it up

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

2 posted 2002-04-08 01:58 PM

You definately did make something beautiful

Great poem...i often wonder what is up there

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

3 posted 2002-04-08 04:47 PM

Xerxes...

Splendid.

I love how you took a theme, and ran with it. Till every drop of your poem was saturated with it. Lovely metaphors! I'd love to say soemthing deep, I really would. Or point out paticular lines I enjoyed. I'm just speechless. The whole thing was fantastic.

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~ Titus

"Tesous Christos, Theou Uios, Soter"

Child of the Stars

Senior Member

since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

4 posted 2002-04-10 04:04 PM

*swoons* This was very well-written and really serene and relaxing...I enjoyed reading it. One of those poems that takes you somewhere. Keep posting.

~Carly

"Feelings are not supposed to be logical. Dangerous is the man who has rationalized his emotions."
~David Borenstein

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

5 posted 2002-04-11 06:22 PM

Aww I simply LOVE IT!!!

sorry for the caps..*slowly trudges off*

Kristen

chasing rain
Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 737
Canada

6 posted 2002-04-13 02:57 PM

This is such a beautiful write! This poem reminded me of how my friend used to write poetry. Some really astounding work here. ^_^

The rhyming and the almost uncaring meter made this so much more different than the usual kind of poetry you would find here. ^^; The style is awesome, very fluid and descriptive.

I love the stars, so this caught my eye. I really thought this was worth reading! Thanks! 'Tis going in me library! ^_^

Leah

"...and sometimes when the music whispers softly in your ears,
take some time to dream a dream and put aside your fears..."

punkrockerrobin

Senior Member

since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

7 posted 2002-04-13 04:04 PM

great poem tks for sharing!
robin

i am me don't tell me different!!
JEFF IS ONE HOT STUD *RAWR*
i want him *DROOLZ*
dam hes hott!!!

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