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Ceinwyn
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0 posted 2002-04-01 04:01 PM


Just something that came to me..no real meaning okay?

Apparently you
Have your reasons
To grin at me so
And apparently
I have my own
To have the nerve
To adorn
The Ice Queen's crown
I'll even
Return the favour
As you kneel before
Me, as I sit
High upon this throne
I'll mock you
The way you mock me
You knew this
Would happen eventually
How long
Did you think
I could stand
You casting me aside
Each time
I called out for you
In the middle of the night
In the middle of the crowded street
So
As you stare deep
Within my ice blue eyes
You'll finally see
My hatred and disguist is
Quite obvious.....

© Copyright 2002 Kristen Brandon - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-04-01 04:11 PM


OO I like this one a lot..*bows* Great Write...(I'd say I can relate...but I cant..and we've had this discussion, haha)


~Lisa

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2 posted 2002-04-01 04:12 PM


Damn, a nice dark one Kristen.

I enjoyed the flow of the picture you painted. It faltered only a little bit. For the most part, it kept me intruged and reading, and I was able to clearly see the picture you painted. Much enjoyed.

~ Titus

"My body is merely the canvas of my soul."
         ~ The Night Owl

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3 posted 2002-04-03 01:38 AM


Im glad you finally saw eye to eye with the person and gave the a dose of their own medicine!! Sounds like they really deserved the treatment they casted upon u!! Good job girl and great poem as usual!

iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf..

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4 posted 2002-04-03 01:48 PM


I loved this!It was nice and cold! I really liked how you kept the lines so short, yet each line flowed into the next.Good job ice queen!
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