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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA 
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Just something that came to me..no real meaning okay?  Apparently you Have your reasons To grin at me so And apparently I have my own To have the nerve To adorn The Ice Queen's crown I'll even Return the favour As you kneel before Me, as I sit High upon this throne I'll mock you The way you mock me You knew this Would happen eventually How long Did you think I could stand You casting me aside Each time I called out for you In the middle of the night In the middle of the crowded street So As you stare deep Within my ice blue eyes You'll finally see My hatred and disguist is Quite obvious..... |
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LCBS Senior Member
since 2001-11-29
Posts 532Connecticut |
OO I like this one a lot..*bows* Great Write...(I'd say I can relate...but I cant..and we've had this discussion, haha) ~Lisa |
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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Damn, a nice dark one Kristen.  I enjoyed the flow of the picture you painted. It faltered only a little bit. For the most part, it kept me intruged and reading, and I was able to clearly see the picture you painted. Much enjoyed.  ~ Titus "My body is merely the canvas of my soul." |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Im glad you finally saw eye to eye with the person and gave the a dose of their own medicine!! Sounds like they really deserved the treatment they casted upon u!! Good job girl and great poem as usual! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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china doll Junior Member
since 2002-01-20
Posts 22 |
I loved this!It was nice and cold! I really liked how you kept the lines so short, yet each line flowed into the next.Good job ice queen! |
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