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laconic Member
since 2002-02-17
Posts 64Melbourne, Australia |
Kielo got me thinkin, bout a love gone by of all the sweet, happy sadness i keep inside i still remember her figure pressed against mine of all the happy times we spent entwined But contrary to what my words, may lead you to believe she was my first love back when I sported baby teeth I still remember the warmth of our first kiss not what i expected but i soon realised this; it felt good just to hold her in my arms overcoming all other needs, she was my ocean of calm i felt at peace she was the color in my world of chromo i felt at ease everything came so easily when we were alone but on an unexpected quirk or mischief at work things didnt turn out as i had planned thought this was a girl i could marry but things got out of hand and we broke apart she left me alone to mend my broken heart but i dont blame her even tho she was my senior in age and years i know inside she held more doubts and fears i love her so much i still do sometimes late at night, i can still picture myself saying "i do" now sitting here with keys under palms i remineice on times her fingers stroked, so slowly and calm... wishing she was still with me in these times of qualm. Once i was cocky, full of fire and spirit but she changed all that, my Anna dearest Yet even after all is said and done every holiday we send each other wishes traces of clues to whats yet to come... ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ I hope i see her again one day...... [This message has been edited by laconic (03-29-2002 08:13 AM).] |
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TigerZ Member
since 2002-01-02
Posts 83Ontario, Canada |
i have no idea what to say other than this was a really great write...wow! A life without love…is no life at all. |
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laconic Member
since 2002-02-17
Posts 64Melbourne, Australia |
thank you very much... personally i thought this was a little lacking.. but its the story of my first love.. and just had to be told.. thanks for the praise tho.. it was much appreciated  |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
I thought it was awesome and not lacking a thing!! Great write and very well written!! iTs bEeN 1 Of ThOsE dAyZ 4 2 MaNY dAyZ nOw..I jUst NeEd a DaY whErE tHe WOrLd cAn tAkE cArE of ItsElf.. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Sweet, this thing we call love, and yet leaves you dumbfounded whenever it slips away, wondering what went wrong..unfortunately some things happen for a reason but I do hope you get your wish, perhaps you will meet again another time? *definately a hopeless romantic* but nontheless it was sweet... Kristen |
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