Teen Poetry #5 |
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destiny502 Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 57OH |
Im cold my heart beats slow it is cold i long for the warmth of caring eyes loving eyes someone to look for me and i miss you your touches your longing gaze the lust i mistook for love or maybe it was no mistake like they claim it must be i loved you though there is no doubt in my heart and i will always have hope in my heart for you because my heart led me down this dirt path my body is hurting my soul is aching and all i can do is wait ~im definately not any good at writing. all my thoughts just kinda gather into a jumble and make no sense at all~ |
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chas Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 101Lynn, ma |
this is good, glad i had the chance to read it.. take care. |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
i liked your poem, i thouhgt it was good, keep writing! *ab* *~"Sometimes I wish I was a little girl again--because bruised knees heal faster than broken hearts."~* |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
this poem had a lot of emotions into it...i think you did a great job!...keep writing...i liked it im addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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Spice Senior Member
since 2001-04-13
Posts 1266Resting in my cardboard box. |
Actually Heather, I liked this alot. I think you showed your feelings well. |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Ok NO! Haha! Your poem was awesome! Your free verse was simply awesome! So much feeling and emotions sent me flying off my 15th floor condo. I am now trying to stagger up the steps to reply to this...how I'm typing I have no idea. THAT'S HOW MUCH I LOVED THIS! haha..... No but seriously.......well done here. I REALLY loved this poem. Awesome, simply awesome. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. |
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Fading Away
since 2001-03-14
Posts 3131Lynchburg, Virginia |
You say you're not good at writing your feelings down, but after reading this I don't believe you! This is an awesome poem. The ending was the best... VERY nice work. I'm sorry it turned out to be heartache in the end. *hugs* Nicely done! I haven't seen you around here much, so I hope to see more posts and replies from you. Nice work, Heather. I enjoyed this. --Marie You can’t expect the roses to grow without the weeds. |
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