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Cinderelly
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0 posted 2002-03-24 10:49 PM


Why does my heart lay in two?

Why do you not feel as bad as I do?

Why’d it have to end like this?

Is it you everyday I miss?

Why does my heart lay in two?

Well, it’s obvious, isn’t it?
I miss you . . .



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Hallucination
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since 2001-03-18
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1 posted 2002-03-25 08:13 AM


This is a heartfelt little poem,
I could hear it sung, but that's just me...
Nice work,

Best Wishes,

Brian.

LCBS
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since 2001-11-29
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2 posted 2002-03-25 02:57 PM


awww this is really sweet, and it was excellently written too....hang in there hun, that feeling of despair goes away
vlraynes
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3 posted 2002-04-18 03:24 AM



Cinderelly-
Short, sweet and to the point.  I like it.
You've done a good job of expressing these
feelings in just a few words.
Well done.
Hugs,
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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4 posted 2002-04-18 01:34 PM


Aww hun ::hugs::..im sorry. You expressed urself nicely though. Short and sweet and impactful

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